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May i

May I kiss your lips to wake heat in them and let the blood rush beneath the flesh making it reddish
May I smell it after it perfumes with ecstasy and taste it with a touch and run with sweet sweat
May I go loose on your body with burning desire to climb and dive?
May I combine with you to hear more than your breathing, yet more your heart beats
May I paint a poem from your screams coming from pleasure
Reaching heaven and then drop like a sleeping feather...

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  • ennovy silver member
    March 4

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    Stunning Write Very Erotic

    This is pure sensuality, and it gave me a an erotic picture of heated pleasure...I loved it....novy


  • Pear gold member
    February 2
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    WOAH, ummm...I need a drink of water like now like seriously! My goodness, this was wooow!!!


  • Rheea gold member
    January 31
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    wwwwwwOwwwwww


  • inspired torture
    January 23

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    now this is purely erotic if i may say but amzingly done
    the imagery is so vivd and the long lines really do emphasis the feeling of lust and love in this scene..
    good job... waiting to read more

    PEACE

    ******JOWELL*******


  • sinner-
    January 16
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    very beautyfully portrayed, extremely mesmerizing ending.....


  • Elrenia
    January 16

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    Lovely. The line: "May I combine with you to hear more than you’re breathing" reminds me of a DS9 episode that the SO keeps saying he wishes he could experience.

    Thank you for sharing.

    rous
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