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moonlit metamorphosis

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i use to love in shining felicity 

these decorated thoughts you vocalized

and (-so be it-) i'll blow a kiss to only (you)
the "ins" and "outs" don't really matter
now do they, my beloved -infatuation-
there's a time and a place for everything;

however,
it's a window of opportunity and heart's desire
Sloth and over indigence are on the horizon

readily abundant and Haphazard!
I'll pretend you didn't hear me pass this on
it's only a secret fantasy that apologizes readily
and yet your signal fires are dwindling in this moonlit 
               -metamorphosis-

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  • Dryad Enya
    September 20

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    You have used a style of poetry I have not seen before, i suspect it is prose with a differing structure. Perhaps you should set up an AP class and teach others so as to enrich the AP world...who knows. As for the poem, I was a little worried avout it at the begining until it all comes to make perfect sense like the rest of the english language.

    Very well done
    Dryad Enya


  • light to a dreamer gold member
    September 6

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    This is different

     You made this poem like  you were talking to someone. Its not my favorite kind of poem form, but it's like someone that has gotten to much and gave themselves to much of someone. But at the end its more like it was a secret that was not to be told. Was a nice read.


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    August 31

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    Superbly Good

    Oh my oh my
    I was just trawlinghere looking for a new read...and a new poet
    I am so glad that I found you.This is really really beautiful.I love the whistfullness, and the way it has a tender ambience...yet it is not at all old lady lavender,
    I am quite sure that I dont "get it" in its entirity...so I plan to book mark it and come back again and again until I do,
    but since I know only too wll the swet infatuation (btw when did you swim in my head lol) this is just a really strong and evvoccative write classic yet fresh...an excellent combination
    thankyou
    T (moonsail)