Most who read see words in rhymes
but what I read are screaming hymns
what you were stood still with time
what is now but fake shadows that mime
in darkness you breathe and in dreams you dive
and whisper your name to feel alive...
Why don't you scream, why don't you shout
why don't you let your anger out
its only time and soon you'll fade
so die with pride, and not with hate.
what did you feel when you read it?
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Excellent Write
Deep, emotional, sad, pain in this read because the world outside of poetry is sometimes hard & cold. You captured the reality of it......
novy
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I felt pain as though this were being directed to me. I'lltell you why they don't do ask u asked...tis because they are afraid of what others might say or do, this is why they stand in the darkness alone...
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Awesome
Great write. I especially like the firts two lines from the second stanza.
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Wonderful
this is dark and i love this... this is my thing somehow....
i can relate to this poem and i really can feel disgust from society? pain and carelessness....
so yes, i'd die in pride and not with hate
i hate to do this too but u got some mistakes that i'd like to point out (dont hate for that)
line 2: is a screaming hymnes --> are screaming hymns
line 3: but a fake shadow that mime --> but fake shadows that mime or a fake shadow that mimes
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