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Violent Pornography

Everybody sucks.
choking chick and sodomy.
so go fuck to death.
because this is a violent pornography.

For sticks and stones
may break my bones,
but wipes and chains
really excite me.

This is the kind of
shit that you get
on your TV.
welcome to my VIOLENT PORNOGRAPHY.

Author notes

i was listening to system of a down-violent pornography and got the idea for this poem.

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  • Florida Sunshine
    February 24, 2008

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    Wow ~ strong and impactful ~

    "For sticks and stones
    may break my bones,
    but wipes and chains <<< Think you mean Whips and Chains"
    really excite me."

    Nice job overall ~ thanks so much for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ best of luck to you!


  • brittany.geeze
    January 16, 2008
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    i love that song by SOAD


  • Stonecreek
    January 15, 2008

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    Your grammar needs work. Also, when taking inspiration from lyrics, try not to overuse them in the poem, as it sounds like copying rather than creativity. But you do caapture the mood of the song with this pome, I'll give you that, at least.


    • SHadowHex666
      January 15, 2008
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      Thanks

      i was in a rush becuz i had to do dishesbut i fixed the spelling errors