To have found you and lost you
when all my dreams have been of you
thought my life was complete
how cruel could life be
Found you and lost you in an instant
just for a moment there was romance
all too soon you were gone
and I was left with a sad love song
So much was said with our first glance
but we both knew there was no chance
all that's left are the memories
and the endless nights you haunt my dreams
None good enough to take your place
can't replace the images of your face
weary spirit finds no rest
left without you my heart is vex
To have found you and lost you
when all of my dreams have been of you
brief moment of care free love
left with an eternity to sob
Author notes
Contest entry, must rhyme.Not too good at this, just thought I would give it a try,,,,,,,,,
A contest entry
- Be One Of My Favorites/ by any1.
600 points, ended January 19, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
And in the end there was nothing
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Very well written. I'm greatly impressed by this piece. it rhymes very well, very free flowing.
shane -
i love this one...i have been away for a while...
didn't forget you though..
and your comments on This Christmas.
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Very Good
To have found you and lost you
when all of my dreams have been of you
brief moment of care free love
left with an eternity to sob
This is beautiful
I know these words well
Loved it all
Rick
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None good enough to take your place
can't replace the images of your face
I liked those lines
Sad little message behind the poem.
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this is a good write rhyme is not my forte, but I applaud you for trying to write in new forms, I struggle with anything but my free writes anything else seems like work to me But this one verse to me made this poem complete and terrific, it grabbed at not only my eyes but my heart!
None good enough to take your place
can't replace the images of your face
weary spirit finds no rest
left without you my heart is vex.
I love this stanza !!!
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Good for you to give rhyme a try. I write mostly traditional but have ventured into free verse and will some more. I felt the sadness within the prose, lost love, something meant to be yet not--so familiar to most of us. And the thought of feeling this kind of sadness and loneliness for an eternity is too much to bear. Well done. I sure hope this isn't true and if it is, let me know and I'll try and lift your spirits so you won't have to be eternally sad. Enjoyed! Thank you and good luck in the contest!--Kel :
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not bad for someone that doesn't usually rhyme. Even though the rhyme could be smoother in places the feeling you wanted to portray came out nicely and I thank you for the entry
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this is good
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