In velvet vacuum

In velvet vacuum of words,
Your tender touch repeats.
Played soft on petalled ears,
Your gently lapping speech
Resounds in white on ochre,
echoes slow heartbeat;
In hushed fingers
To my lips.
~
Tarry, gentle lover's tongue:
The pad of soft-skinned feet,
Replies as faint rebellion purrs;
Sound's absent waves,
So sweet.
~

Author notes

Shhhh....
53 words

A contest entry

Shhh.... by Lj-. 300 points, ended January 23, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
*** UNCOVER MY FEELINGS *** by Rebekah-Ann. 500 points, ended April 2, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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By me, right now

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Rebekah-Ann
March 31, 2008

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mmmm so romatic and so well penned. I loved the lines; Played soft on petalled ears and also The pad of soft-skinned feet Thanks for this lovely entry! Becks
Blushfulmoon
January 19, 2008

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excellent~
You have some beautiful lines penned in this poem...
And your poem goes perfect with the contest...shhhhh
Love it...
Best of luck in the contest...were I judging...
This would be a winner in my book
I am loving your poems....beautiful...
Hugs
Susan~~~~
IrishGypsyRose
January 15, 2008
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Sweet and Touching
In hushed fingers upon my lips....what a sweet beautiful line....I hope you do well in the contest
Kept As A Shadow
January 15, 2008

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Cute
This is such a sweet poem!
It can be one romantic poem
with a night out with a
boyfriend My favorite
part was::

In velvet vacuum of words,
Your tender touch repeats.
Played soft on petalled ears,
Your gently lapping speech

This one really caught my attention.
Especially since it was at the beginning.
PurpleCrocus
January 15, 2008

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Wondeful alliteration is used with "velvet vaccuum". The tone of the entire poem is soft and tender, and a very comforting read. Nothing to be changed. Glorious.