Treading through neglected paths of midnight
o’re winding tracks of shadowed wispy haze,
enveloped atoms cling the misty air
reclaiming spirits of lost bygone days.
The roof lay open to the darkened skies
as silver moonlight limned in steely pale,
looming towers of alabaster standing
sentinel down long abandoned trails.
Penumbra space attired in fingered web
silver gates wrought from silken walls
thrust aside, swift as parting curtains
opening the way to marble halls
Moonbeams shattered in the cold embrace
of raw-boned trees opaque in littered light,
as white mist swirled and swelled on frosted loam
and nighttime senses surged to dizzy height.
Unseen footfalls echoed in the hedgerow
at first, in front and then somewhere behind,
imagination ruled my heightened wits
uneasiness rose stealthy up my spine.
Each step became more infinitely strange
as terror urged my body to make haste,
along that lonely path through leafless trees
to leave behind the phantoms I’d embraced.
A contest entry
- PICTURE PROMPT by Liquid memories.
600 points, ended January 20, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 8 by whispernthedark.
700 points, ended October 25, 2008, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice take on the picture, wonderful write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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wonderful, just wonderful and beautiful as well, i mean your words make you just feel everything, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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delightful write. thank you for entering. success in the contest.
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The descriptiveness of your poem really enhanced
the feeling of fear and anxiety. I love the way
you use insinuations and emotion to provoke that
in the reader without naming the fear. great job. I love the background too! perfect.
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Excellent Poem
This is really a neat poem,the way you wrote it and goes with the back ground!I felt like i was in the wilderness and walking through a forest with pine tress!Great piece of work,with the picture!Very well written,and nicely done!Keep up the great work1I really llove reading poems like yours they are really fun to read,and how they express so much1Lisa k haslett raytown missouri!
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This is beautifully written. I enjoyed it alot. Good format! Good luck in the contest. Blessed Be! ~~S & M~~
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it reminds me of my favorite things =. night and long walks. very very good job and the best of luck in this contest. i love your use of words and i can almost smell the night air. very beautiful.
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i really liked this i fell like im taken the trip though this forest which is good writing, the ryhmn is great not in the least bit forced, and the description and metaphor is top class i love this little journy of fear and excitment that i have just read great stuff, one suggestion though
cling to the misty air? rather than cling the misty air
great work best of luck in this contest ( :
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so creative, i like your writing. really good. 2 thumbs up.!!!!!!!!!
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i like it, it's so, bold and original and i realy like the picture
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