A new dawn brings another sortie,
In the same war devoid of pillory.
And a loyal army of skilled divisions,
Don armour strong against derision.
Soon the attack will come as it always does,
And the insults will be thrown in their droves.
But always watchful our watchers are
The rebels from the loyal to bar.
And to make our stay more pleasant,
They’ll stand their ground against all present.
While an armchair general plays the game;
A monotonous battle against enemies the same,
Yet somehow different with each complaint
Urging attack, attack, attack…restraint.
Defeating rebellion in a flurry of words.
The pen is mightier than the sword.
Author notes
Still needs a lot of work but then I'm useless at poety. Inspired by a discussion with Electric Sunrise today.
Please tell me what you think
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ohhh, i like it! the words or describtion that you used were phanomanel (or however you spell it ;-p) and to me it is talking about bring harsh to another human being through not actions, but words... good write!!!
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wow, another awesome piece
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this is pretty cool, it describes how i am too
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its pretty good
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To have written this out and call yourself " useless?" Ah! I think not! There is a great deal of potential here.......the flow and the imagery are wonderful albeit a bit scattered but that is nothing that can not be fixed. One senses the battle with in when reading this! I liked it a lot!
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Ann's sentiments sum it up bud and i think i'll keep with her and throw something in too, you never know what you end up with when you blend ideas
And at the end of battle,
with damage on both sides,
the general surveys this mess,
and wonders such a waste of lives.
The potential there,
untapped yet pure,
hence spilled upon the soil,
was this really nessicary,
was it worth the toil?
From his desk he heaves a sigh,
the general is aware,
that this starts again at dawn,
and his troops, they must prepare.
Enjoy man, Ann and I would be happy to collab with you on this too if you'd like
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I can totaly understand this and have really enjoyed your thoughts..... I would like to respond with a little bit of my own.....
Each dawn a brand new battle brings,
drawn and weary from every attack,
but together they stand under orders,
each watching the others mans back.
the pen drives on so calm and solid,
repelling the assault that always appears,
standing firm on the side of justice,
as they have done for so many years.
Calm and secure in their standing,
the small band stand alone under fire,
defending the General in his armchair,
pens blazing with a speed to admire.
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