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This blows!

Blowing up

blowing wind
blowing chunks

puke on your chin.

Blowing chances
blowing leads
blowing brains out
in moments of greed.

Blowing balloons up
blowing smoke
blowing money
when you're broke.

Blowing tires
blowing lights
blowing candles
when you retire at night.

 

Blowing away

blowing by

blowing kisses

to say goodbye.

 



 

Author notes

miss sweetlove,
this is neither funny nore adult..its weird and other, but it is marked Appropriate. also there are no exclamation marks in the poem just the title ...I know I'm a cheeky one

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  • montez gold member
    January 16, 2008

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    Just a..

    ...fair effort IMHO.
    Again the most simplistic of rhyming schemes, so I'm amazed at the non-rhyme of "wind" and "chin" in the first verse.
    More pertinently, the poem is written in such a "stilted" style that it doesn't flow well.
    Robin.


  • thricelightning
    January 15, 2008

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    I love it!
    You are so creative and everything i read that youve wrote just amazes me more and more!


  • Edna Sweetlove
    January 15, 2008
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    Cheeky, sweet baldie! Yeeha!


    • Ogreatbaldone gold member
      January 15, 2008
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      how did you know it was me Edna? I even called you MIss in my comment, you cheated didnt you...glad you liked it...you did like it didnt you? ...peace Terry

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