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Nature's Lament (Tritina)

My beauty once was famed through every land.
'Til men, (destroyers), brought about decay;
Then ruin raged, while turning all to dust.

I howled in anguish, through discarded dust,
And oh! my desolate, infected land
Cried out to me, to free it from decay.

And yet, my tears are now this fate decay;
For all they touch then withers into dust,
And in it's wake leaves lifeless, barren land.

I ache for my land in decay and dust!


Author notes

Prompt: Nature's Lament

Tritina

Being modeled from the Sestina, there is no rhyme scheme, instead it comprises of three stanzas using the same three words in a Sestina like pattern, and a final line which uses the three words.
A.. B.. C...
C.. A.. B...
B.. C.. A...
A,B,C...

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  • Eusebius
    April 23

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    Just a marvelous poem with a great poetical voice! I absolutely loved it, loved it...excellent! Don't think I'd ever try this form! bravo!


  • crazymomma
    May 9, 2008
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    Such a sad and true poem. Very well written


  • lianonsidhe silver member
    April 5, 2008

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    Wonderful!
    I love the lines:
    'I howled in anguish, through discarded dust,
    And oh! my desolate, infected land
    Cried out to me, to free it from decay.'
    It's almost like the cry of a mother for her child. So sad that we can only do our small part, when others better placed do nothing at all. Super imagery.
    Teach me how!
    Love from your daffy Auntxx


  • mars
    January 20, 2008
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    Bravo Darianna! You pulled off the Tritina very nicely. There's no form that can challenge you.


  • Amera gold member
    January 17, 2008

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    I love this and your image is very vivid. Penned in decasyllable your rhyme does not seem forced at all. I'm the Sestina teacher here on AP so this poem naturally attracted my interest. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • penman gold member
    January 16, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    January 15, 2008

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    You really love these forms that are a little different don't you Mo. But, whatever you like, I like this one very much. Very clever use of the words and nicely done to enhance the prompt as well. I think you're back into the swing of things.

    Love ya,
    Dad

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