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Loving Flower

Soft and beautiful
That is what I will call thee
Standing out from all the rest
Hidden amongst the weeds
Showing your true colors
So that all can see
What you have done for others
And also for me
You have brought me life
Brought me someone to agree
With everything that I've ever said
And to such a degree
That I can no longer say
I can foresee
What is lost in your petals
But laugh with jubilee
At the beauty of the midnight rose

Author notes

A second prompt i chose from my contest...
contest- Sweet--Fire--Roses

Contest Link-http://allpoetry.com/poem/4072615 Non-Rhyming Poem

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    May 2, 2008
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    an elegant piece that radiates love and tenderness. Very nicely penned.
    Rory

  • piccola silver member
    April 11, 2008

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    This is beautiful and I like it. The beginning doesn't move me much though. Words like beautiful and soft could be replaced with something more descriptive and interesting I think. Thank you for entering.


  • Blooming Poet
    March 21, 2008

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    I love how the last line is kinda your username. beautiful. I love flowers, espcially roses. Love these lines;
    What is lost in your petals
    But laugh with jubilee
    At the beauty of the midnight rose



  • leander Moderators member
    February 21, 2008

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    This poem radiates positiveness (if that is even a world) to all the corners of this page soothing and beautiful piece this is!

    Thanks for another entry
    Leander


  • N e a r
    January 23, 2008

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    "You have brought me life
    You have brought me someone to agree" I love the flow of these lines. These are my favorite.

    I would, again, check your puncuation when you write, because you have a lot of i's instead of I's.

    I love how simple the subject can be, but yet you still pull off a wonderful write. You have talent, and I like it. I believe I am going to be favoriting you after my comment frenzie is complete.

    M a r l u x i a


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    January 22, 2008

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    This is very beautiful
    Such a peaceful & Graceful poem
    Excellent
    Thankyou for entering my contest
    &
    Goodluck

    Jaz <3


  • LadyUnique silver member
    January 15, 2008

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    this is very soothing to the soul. it speaks of all good things. good use of the word 'jubilee'
    thank you for your entry and good luck


  • PatheticKt
    January 15, 2008

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    aww, what a lovely write and loving flowers is a blissful moment that we should try cherishing it in life ^_^ this piece really made me smile


  • Dmonik
    January 15, 2008

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    I Like this write
    The rhyming scheme and your word choice bring this piece to life.
    Well written and thought provoking. Love the last line too. Bravo!


    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      January 15, 2008
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      Thank you very very much,it means a lot to me. Especially since i didn't think the rhyming would work.

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