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Joy's Well

Open heart’s wings
float on heaven's breeze
Drink fountain’s joy
God’s essence...
Breathe in bliss
peace blossoms
soul's petals dance
joys serenade mind
excelling eternity's sunrise
kissing a smile in you

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    December 6, 2008

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    Humm..i love the magical immagery you weaved in the words of this small yet a very vast expressive poetry..thanks for such a wonderful piece..well done...

  • voluptoussheila
    January 26, 2008
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    well worded...short yet well performed...the words are light and lift u like a pleasant breeze,,

    Breathe in bliss
    peace blossoms
    soul's petals dance
    joys serenade mind
    excelling eternity's sunrise
    kissing a smile in you

    luved the way u ended..

    cheers!!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 17, 2008
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    Congrats on the HM!

    Lovely imagery portrayed in so few words. Great read. Congrats on the HM!


  • ForsakenOne74
    January 16, 2008

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    Liked certain lines more than others, flow was off, great imagery tho..over all the piece wasn't too bad...


  • penman gold member
    January 16, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very nicely done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Devils Reject
    January 16, 2008
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    Very nicely worded. Good piece

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