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Bleeding Sunrise

 

Torrents of crimson rain does fall,
accompanied by the winds squall.
Emptiness fills this barren land,
destroyed, by a single command.

The bleak extends into the dark,
save for glowing embers and sparks.
Mountains disintegrated into dust,
rivers bubbled till they combust.

Utter annihilation won that day,
victory however has gone astray.

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Prompt; Bleeding Sunrise
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  • CherryOnTop
    January 20, 2008

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    I love this. The bleeding sunrise is masterfully penned. As always you far exceed anything imaginable. Best luck in the contest.


  • Timespell
    January 17, 2008

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    A world full of losers...Looking on at the bleeding sunrise. There is never any winners when it comes to wars.

    Congrats on a well deserved award for this great piece.

    All the best,

    ~T.S~


  • penman gold member
    January 16, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • frownsnfreckles
    January 16, 2008

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    excellent rhyming here, not something I do much but feel inspired now to practice. Some great imagery, very dramatic! 'mountains disintegrated into dust, rivers bubbled till they combust'


  • Ebyru
    January 15, 2008
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    very flowing and pretty.

    I like it! <3

    (p.s. been a long time..haha)


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 15, 2008

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    The End is Nigh lol

    Fab as always!! You are a queen of rhyme hunny!! Never forced, just an ease about it.

    Imagery is brilliant as always too.. sigh.. you always do the BEST job!!
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    (like the new pic too.. aww, cute!!)


  • Venusbabi
    January 15, 2008
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    that is really good. it is talking about cutting, right?


    • LadyDementia gold member
      January 15, 2008
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      Err no it is about the end of the world..mountains crumbling....?


  • new light
    January 15, 2008
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    this has brilliant imagery.

    AMAZING


  • CherryOnTop
    January 15, 2008
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    Totally awesome..Very much a bleeding sunrise indeed.Well penned and the imagery is superb.

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