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I Battle On

I Battle On


Dark and dreary
cold and weary
I step through the darkness.

Remorse and regret
resolve and intent
I move through my weakness.

Trip and tumble
slide and rumble
I climb up my tower.

Shrieking and screaming
pulsing and seething
I deal with my demons.

Fighting and clawing
kicking and gnawing
I lose in my battle.

Begging and pleading
wanting and needing
I rise from the ashes.

Dark and dreary
cold and weary
I step through the darkness.

Author notes

Op 5, Alex needs a life. I don't know if this is long enough to be considered "Epic" but this is my life man...

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  • nikkia
    April 11, 2008

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    i really enjoyed reading this. the flow was awesome and you really did tell a great story. nice job! thank you very much for the entry and good luck in the contest


  • GuardianPhoenix7289
    February 11, 2008

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    lol

    No it's not epic. 21 lines.... Perhaps if you had checked out the link for my poem Torture for the Brain, you'd get an idea what I mean by long/epic. But whatever, it's no big deal, some people aren't made out to write really long stuff, everyone is meant to write different stuff. It also can deal with patience... some people don't have enough to write something that is so damn long. XD But yah, some of my bigger writes.... range in the 125+ lines length. THAT is epic haha....

    But anyways, onto my critique!
    I liked this, so that's good for you. It was a nice simple little write with some good imagery and flow! Great rhyming as well!!! Rhyming is my weakness. XD It told a good dark story and explained your life in a very interesting way! Good luck in the contest, I will certainly still consider it in the trophy-world.