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thinking of you

thinking of you
... a sea anemone
completely open

does this follow the guidelines of a 21st century haiku?

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  • Anna Emkah
    January 16, 2008

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    I just read your fishy Haiku and I can't help it, but this one could go in that contest as well for me now. I wish I had not read the other one first. What is a sea anenome? Do you mean "anemone"?
    Anna.


    • myron silver member
      February 4, 2008
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      fishy

      yes Anna - you are right - it should be an anemone. thank you very much for picking this up for me.
      & i agree with you that this one is much better and evocative - i deleted the other haiku because it was crass.


  • poet107
    January 15, 2008
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    well done senko....completely open....to catch it's prey...larry