I saw her behind the glass
if you saw her eyes
you’d remember too
mascara tears, mascara tears
falling through your nightly fears
bruised, abused
your vacant eyes
widen but never chastise
the lies
your cracked and broken skin
see it bleed
see it bleed
see it bleeding down the wall
the writing’s on the fucking wall
pretty porcelain
my pretty porcelain doll
how do you live
how do you live without a soul?
while you’re giving up
my pretty little doll
I’m screaming to the night
how do you live
how do you live without a soul?
pretty doll
packed away
abused again
another day
pretty doll
packed away
abused again
another day
bleeding lips, bleeding lips
pressed beneath your fingertips
quiver, shiver
your glassy eyes
widen but never chastise
the lies
your blood and blackened tears
see it bleed
see it bleed
see you bleeding down the wall
pretty porcelain
my pretty porcelain doll
how do you live
how do you live without a soul?
while you’re giving up
my pretty little doll
I’m screaming to the night
how do you live
how do you live without a soul?
rose lips
fingertips
vacant eyes
desperate cries
aching lips
fingertips
twitching as you die
twitching as you die
again
pretty porcelain
my pretty porcelain doll
how do you live
how do you live without a soul?
while you’re giving up
my pretty little doll
I’m screaming to the night
how do you live
how do you live without a soul?
pretty doll
packed away
abused again
another day
pretty doll
packed away
abused again
another day
pretty doll
what can I say?
she was the one
the one
I couldn’t save
Author notes
This is an extended and lyric version of a previous poem of mine, Scarlet Porcelain.
im ultimate beluga ~ not sure if this is what you wanted, but hey, may as well enter anyway!
A contest entry
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please tell me what you think
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This is a great piece. You have written a wonderful piece, I like the repetition of this one too. Well done.Best to you
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Holy COW~! I am absolutely in love. This is really twisted. But i LOVE the way this was written. Your line breaks really make the poem. That and sticking with the porcelain doll theme. It was really really great.
~kenz
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This is beautiful... The repetition of certain lines only strengthened it, and it added an ineffable exquisiteness to the work. This is definitely one of the better works I've read of late... This is perfection. Well done, and congrats on the bronze!
Laura x
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wow this is awesome.... i like very much thank you for sharing this with us and gooood luck in this contest..!!!!!!!!!11
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Great write, It brought to light a wonderful array of images. The flow was excellent as well. Great work on leaving ample room for personal interpretation and perspective. The short tense lines were intense in their emotional stabs and cuts. Thanks for the great read.
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Wow
just incrable I love your stile of writting!! -
yes, as luminescence said, I really like the repetition.
this would make a great song.
the thoughts are great, kind of leave some more for others to think about.
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Woa... I DO NOT like the F-word.... I would say take it out because you have the beginning of a WONDERFULL piece.. the repition was great.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck,
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i totally like your poem even though its sad and all emo i love it, keep up this kind of work
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sad
I like the opening stanza very much. The rhyming is very good, and the repetitive phrases and words, are very effective.
Ethereal One
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i dig it
i like this and taking into concideration itt lyrics ill bypass the rymeing. its a tragedy to sound i cold almost a mornfull base line whilei read it. the only thing i think needs work is the last stanz or verse i gusse. its just broke i think but what i know i could never write lyrics. This was nicely pened keep up the great work.
Bryant j Frye
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thanks for the comment! ill have another look at the last stanza/verse thingey, thanks for the suggestion!
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i came back to read again...and it still amazes me...well done..peace and harmony... desi
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Did sound familiar after the first couple of stanzas.
It's a great poem and really does get a strong point across but i think there is a little to much repetition.
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wow....this hits hard and fast...goes straight to the gut. Any woman who has ever been in an abusive situation will relate to this deeply(as i once was and never will be again...God willing). I'm glad you featured this. I'm out of points so i'll have to
instead... peace and harmony...desi
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thanks for sharing
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just saying 'thanks for sharing' is monumentally unhelpful you know...
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lol
thats funny
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