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Goodbye to Your Kung-fu

Curl me up inside a song,
with voices I have heard all along
Catch me in a lie...because I'm lying
Just, judging wonder I know to be true
Blind faith is always see-through,
so I just can't believe him
Nothing, his faithful guru,
-to believe in nothing-
Well, I caught him lying,
(I mean strongly thinking)
that I am the nothing too
Dumb bitch, just won't submit
Well that just won't do
So its goodbye to your kung-fu
Unhappily ever after ending
Healing pending
Goodbye to your kung-fu

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  • Eusebius
    April 2
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    Bravo

    Finely and very deftly crafted poem... it seems mildly casual on the surface, but reveals a good deal of emotion beautifully understated (which is always best and most potent in poetry)! Excellent! bravo.... bravo... bravo..
  • Eusebius
    February 15

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    bravo

    A song of personal sorrow and lament, betrayal, by those we love and thought loved us.... very deftly done here! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • PerfectImperfection
    February 8

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    Nice flow. You give the suspense of emotion an extra boost to dig in a little deeper. Such a great metaphor for being tired of the run around; aka, the bullshit. Why contort? Great write!!! {Love the BG}


  • Estatic over him
    January 19

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    this is good. in my portal i think i have finally healed inside. you know like one of those things that just kinda happens and you only just realize it? i hope your doing good.

  • Topnotchsy
    January 18

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    Honestly didn't understand the poem from beginning to end, but really liked specific like,

    "Unhappily ever after ending
    Healing pending"

    Might need a couple more reads to figure it out though.

    . Rewarded 4


  • neurosine gold member
    January 18

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    Intellectual congress has alot to answer for when it comes to actuality, and the real circumstances which may ensue.
    That's how we know what's real for us.

  • Axel Gold
    January 18
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    interesting piece.

    things to consider:
    "Catch me in a lie...because I'm lying" this could be more effective if '...' was replaced with a dash and the line was broken in two.
    "Just, judging wonder I know to be true" I don't think that 'just' is really necessary here

    Axel Gold

  • Bluebook Pet
    January 18
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    Your title just caught me
  • Prairie Racer-8
    January 18

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    I like the list and rhymes, the ending was perfect

  • I Dream
    January 15

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    Fantastic line AND

    a great poem
    Unhappily ever after ending
    Healing pending

    that is great just love it
    as always my friend

    a great write

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