Outside my window,
I see a plant.
I see a plant that’s
Insignificant and timid.
But,
This plant still strives,
Thrives.
Outside my window,
Past the plant and over.
I see a cloud,
Silhouetted against the night
Sky.
All mankind take it for granted,
As just drops in the sky.
I see more than that.
I see a work of art,
Inspiration.
Outside my window,
Past the cloud.
I see just one
Small, faint star.
Insignificant,
And pale.
Yet that one star
Shines brighter than any other
Outside my window.
Inside my window,
Before the plant,
Sits me.
Who will I be?
An inspiration? Or just another
Poet.
Whoever may I become,
I pray.
I will strive,
Thrive,
Inspire,
Shine.
I will be
Me.
Author notes
did this while doing homework...
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I love this. It's simple but really paint a clear picture. Great write hun xxx
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simple and pretty
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We'll I tried commenting on this once, but the window closed half way through. Darn school computers -- pieces of poop! lol
disregard that.
I liked this one... It is very simple and all.. But, it does hold a great deeper meaning. I like that. But, me, being me (personally) I would have liked if it had more description... More to visualize (because that is what I like), but it think that that would make this a bit more unsimpllistic but otherwise a better poem.
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I lovelovelove the simplicity, it works so well with the subject matter. Too many people try to look intellectual by using too many flowery words, but you pulled this off with an amazing understated elegance. Great rythm, great write, great job!
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This was a very interesting read. I like it a lot. It has a unique feel to it for me. I like how it all came back to you, sitting there looking out the window. It was engrossing. Almost makes one wish it were longer. Well done and Bravo!
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i loved it... very personal .. yet open to someone feeling it themselves... great write... great read... thanks for sharing...
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This is very simple but I can tell you really thought it through. The progression from the plant, to the cloud, to the star and then back to you was intriguing. I saw where it was going but the ending was so powerful. We can only pray that we will be inspiring to others, but we can actively be a person worthy of inspiration. Well done.
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To no surprise, beautiful. I love how you take the simple things around you, that much like you said are taken for granted, and make them into beautiful peices like this. honestly young man, you have a beautiful mood to your poetry and a natural talent. keep it up!
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