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In The End

Living in a world of my own,
Too affraid to cross over to yours.
Because I know you'll just pull me in,
Until I'm to weak to fight back.
Then you will push me away.
Knowing I can't stand on my own.
So I Try to learn to stand again,
But as soon as I do you come back.
And pull me in again.
But this time
You will be the one not standing,
In the end

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  • Crazy-Dan
    January 20, 2008

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    Awsome, I love this
    To me its like the story of someone who's tired of getting picked on fighting back, i love it.

  • Japanda
    January 16, 2008
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    this is very easy to relate to.


  • hey charlie
    January 15, 2008
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    Good job. By now I'm sure you've noticed you spelled 'afraid' wrong, so it's no big deal. There is one part I'm having a little trouble with

    "So I Try to learn to stand again,
    But as soon as I do I come back.
    And pull me in again."

    Is that correct? Because it doesn't make much sense to me. Besides that, it's a wonderful write. Good job.


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    January 15, 2008

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    Ouch!!!!!

    so smashing

    in the end what a sudden move, liked it alot

    keep up the good work
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words