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Obsession


She saw the sunrise in the facets of his aqua eyes
He gave heat to the sun and heaven to the skies
blinded by his beauty that was surely purest gold
he warmed her world that was arid dark and cold

A brilliant rare jewel she had found him at last
Every thought of herself she put into the past
She would pay any price to make him her own
And become a slave to the king of her throne

Fulfilling his whims became her purpose in life
Not once did she falter in this fruitless strife
And he made sure to let known his every wish
She gave him everything on an ornate silver dish

He held her to his service with no promises made
The image of the jewel began to tarnish and fade
Until she changed thoughts of owning this prize
she no longer saw the light that shone in his eyes

His gold had tarnished and the stone only paste
She thought of time lost that seemed such a waste
The center was flawed and the setting was poor
The fire in zirconium eyes was just a baited lure

Skill of a craftsman catches the next one’s eye
What seems to be genuine can become just a lie
He will display his charms as soon as she is gone
A flash of fools gold and a false heart of stone

Author notes

Option #4 my greatest hopes and fears are centered around you....Obsessive love hurts everyone involved, you can try to become everything that the other needs and lose yourself in the process.

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Comments


  • BabyBun silver member
    June 19, 2008
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    Thanks and good luck

  • Lucifetus gold member
    February 10, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this. It actually strangely enough, reminds me of relationship that ended a month ago. I like the rhyme, its done well and doesn't seem tacky or cliche.
    Good job!


  • Perfectly Imperfect
    January 14, 2008
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    This is a really great take on the prompt, I like where you took this. The rhyme is good, and the story unfolded well. Thank you for your entry x


    • malmadre gold member
      January 15, 2008
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      I changed my rhyme scheme a bit to an aabb. This will probably be one of my personal favorites..