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The Stay...



He once sat upon the devils throne
and claimed the kingdom as his own.

His name reached the depths of hell
Where the devil slumbered in his shell.

 

But time passed and the devil awoke

To find this beast inside his cloak.

With two loud roars from the pits of hell

The demonic beasts stood tall and proud.

 

Devil just stood there as 'red as red'

Whilst the other beast then calmly said.

Fuck you Satan I've come back to rein

I will send you to heaven in a chariot of flames.

 

Fathers been waiting for this day to come

So come on you fucker if you really want some.

Then Satan sent his army to conquer the beast

But they were all trampled underneath his feet.

 

Satan then screamed with all of his might 

I will rip out your heart and pull out your eyes

They battled for hours in those fires of hell

Satan never gave an inch but the beast would not fail.

 

I've defeated your army's you have no sinners left

Satan you fucker I've taken your best. 

Hell came to a stand still on that very day

When the beast and Satan fucked up the stay. 

 

No army of sinners could keep fires hot

When the beast and Satan are losing the plot. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    i thought the swearing added a layer of edge...it kept
    it "tense" so that we would follow the writer right
    to where he wanted us to go......cleverly done!
    I was tense!
    contemporarily it does seem that right now the markets
    of greed are devouring themselves no matter how much
    we the bailout payers are throwing our hard earned
    dollars into the fire....700 billion to be exact.
    Interesting...I liked this story....even HELL has
    it's problems! (lol)
    figures huh...damn, you can't even suffer in peace
    anymore!

    i liked it!
    ears/Seattle


  • InMyFlames
    March 6, 2008
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    i think you swear to much in this i dont find it necessary other than that great work


    • Timespell
      March 6, 2008
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      LOL... Maybe you're right, but I must also say when you are writing, it is very easy to get carried away by the actual storyline. Yes the dreaded "F Word" can be found in this piece a few times, but I am only portraying a fictional event inside my minds eye... I expect our ears would of been burned a tad more if this was reality.

      Thanks for reading and for your comments.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • PastelMoons gold member
    March 1, 2008
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    This is very intriguing
    I was completely enthralled
    in this -Excellent piece!
    ~Pastel


    • Timespell
      March 2, 2008
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      Thanks... Glad you like my dark story

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • howlinginpain
    March 1, 2008

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    A nice war in the pits of hell, excellent. I normally don't like so much rhyme but made it work here. Very good piece.


    • Timespell
      March 2, 2008
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      Thanks for reading and commenting on thisittle tale of mine.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Brian12
    January 16, 2008

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    AWSOME...again, u rule...


    • Timespell
      January 17, 2008
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      Thanks for reading this one Brian.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 16, 2008

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    This is great, a war over hell...I'm in! Hehe very well penned...I like it Best of luck in the contest


    • Timespell
      January 17, 2008
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      Thanks...

      Yeah...you never no what happens down by those burning coals.

      Thanks for reading.

      ~T.S~


  • VoltaicHypnosis
    January 16, 2008
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    Interesting... the best you say? It ROCKS! Great job! -cheers-

    • Timespell
      January 16, 2008
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      Thanks...

      There was only about 2 hours left by the time I finished this one. I did take out my original entry 'Ghastliness' to re-enter a fresh write. Which I thought would be better.

      Thanks again for reading and commenting.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    January 15, 2008
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    Battle for Hell -- hmmm

    Lady D


    • Timespell
      January 15, 2008
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      LOL... It's surprising what I can come up with.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • playin with scissor
    January 15, 2008
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    hmmmmmmmmmmmmm very interesting i like it

    • Timespell
      January 15, 2008
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      Thanks...

      Glad you liked this one and it made you have a deeper think about the possibility.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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