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I want.................

I've been craving you like chocolate

and the thought of what I would do to you

is dripping desire accross my vision.

I thought of playing a little game,

where my hips tease your eyes.

I want you to memorize my silhouette while I

dance curves through your view

I want you to suffocate in my lips

Before they even touch

I want to spin fantasies around your tongue

as you scratch at tainted air,

Wanting me

Needing me

I want you dizzy from my scent, I want you

weak.

I want to come closer.

I want to tiptoe around your aching pulse and

settle between your legs.

I want to rub my skin against yours like lotion,

close my eyes and arch my back like a gymnast leaving my body

thrown over your shoulder like a hunter who's caught his prey.

I want my whispers to form sentences between your thighs s as I blanket your chest with my back.

I want to bend down to your toes to let you know that’s

how

       I 

         like

                it.

Then I want to flip my hair back and unveil a fierce stare with lips spread eagle

                               and tell you that now

                                                          ..................you can touch me




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  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    March 30

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    Excellent

    I like the way you have arranged and constructed this one, it somehow makes the poem work better. Generally these types of poems bore me, because they are like cybersex in the form of poetry. But, this seems to work. Great Write! ~Peace~Gar

  • macandrew
    March 1

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    I want to rub my skin against yours like lotion

    Now that is an excellent line. Your poems are like a sweet drink in the desert.

    John
  • Colin OBrien
    February 14
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    This is just smoking hot. Pure love

  • Pure Thought silver member
    February 4

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    The first , maybe second poem of yours I have read. WOW

    Such and awesome picture you have painted here. Nice anticipation, a great restaurant and great sex is based in anticipation.
    Well done,
    Buddy


    • Layne..
      February 4
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      Hey thank you so much for reading my work, I ham pleased that you enjoyed it I will be back to check out more of yours as well
      -Layne

  • leander gold member
    January 31

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    A nice and sensual poem you have written here again, you have managed to use some great imagery inside the lines!

    Very well done I like this one a lot!
    Leander

  • ariosto gold member
    January 24

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    Woah! You don't want much do ya?
    I came here to see what you've been up to after reading the nice comment on my authors page and my oh my...what a naughty girl you've been!

    What can I say, (it turned me on?)...nahh, I can't say that and be poetical, so how about;

    "The vividness of your imagry had a profound effect on this viewer's sensibilities, more than a poem, it is in fact a cinema verité of words."

    Yeah


    d


    • Layne..
      January 24
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      Thank you very much for your very kind words, I am glad you liked this, lol

  • InnocenceAlive
    January 21

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    Well...

    If pure ecstasy were transformed into poetry...

    I'd say you've beat...er....pulled it off. lol.

    I really liked this. Especially "I want to bend down to your toes to let you know that's how/I/Like/It." I was like OOOOH! I literally squealed....hehe. So great.


    • Layne..
      January 21
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      LOL, thank you, lol.....I am glad you enjoyed
      -Layne

  • Ted E Bare gold member
    January 17

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    Now that's S~m~o~k~i~n~g!!!!! Now you have me in the mood to write some erotica (but unlikely that I will with my shoulder). I think you are the competition to beat in the contest and good luck.

    Ted E


    • Layne..
      January 17
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      Thank you very much for your kind words, glad you enjoyed

      • Ted E Bare gold member
        January 18
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        You're more than welcome, but I wrote what I felt from your read...actually I could have spent some more time elaborating on the comment for it was that good to me. My problem is that I'm super limted on my typing abilities due to my surgery. It has taken some time to even type this on the fly(lol). So please know that this piece can get any reader in an erotic mood and that's coming from someone who dabbles in writing erotica myself

  • Titus gold member
    January 16

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    Sensual highlights at their best!

    So much here to ponder. This is not a tease, more like a compromise, the inevitable began the moment you spelt out, when you wrote the title. Seductiveness with all the properties for decencies well positioned, no pun intended. There is much here, as a desert as was the main, 'course', lovely banter.


  • Amarige
    January 15

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    Sensuality speaking outloud~

    Woooooow very sensual and very beautiful in the same time..you described that intimate moment with so much intensity and joy. Your words are always amazing my friend..best of luck in the contest
    Amarige


  • Sign of the Swine
    January 15
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    Wow...this left me speechless...Brilliant write.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 15

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    Oh damn!

    You did it to me again! l.o.l.! guess I got to step back and let you get by to get your gold! THIS WAS ON FIRE!!


  • moluv10
    January 15

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    Oh My...... you really did it on this one Layne! So sensual and seductive! Wonderfully written! This is what i needed to wake up this morning. Best of luck to you in the contest.


  • chrisl1360
    January 15
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    WHOA!!!!!!!

    SEXY..SEXY...SEXY!! Loved it, sooo intense and great detail. That was hot! Great job!

  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    January 14

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    "I want to rub my skin against yours like lotion,
    close my eyes and arch my back like a gymnast leaving my body thrown over your shoulder like a hunter who's caught his prey."


    Dam...this gave me goose bumps, and chills! Woohoo! *sigh*


  • michellemybelle gold member
    January 14

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    hot hot hot! I loved this, great seductive descriptions and I love the end.
    just amazing
    Michelle


  • azlyn gold member
    January 14

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    Damn...that was HOT! I was just trying to enjoy that and hurry to the end at the same time...LOL! Whoa...let me catch my breath here! This is very much snsual. Thanks for the entry and best of luck in the contest!

    Az

    • Layne..
      January 14
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      LOL, thank you very much, ..I am glad you enjoyed and it was what you were looking for.......
      -Love Layne
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