Put the gun to my head
Pull the trigger, make me dead
No more life, no more pain
No more memories to sustain
My death will come so very quick
Without hesitation I hear the click
BOOM! The darkness is riddled with light
I fall to my knees and start to lose sight
I see the blood, it's running fast
Sweet relief has come at last
Tell me what you think
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ahhh-mazing!!!
i love this...u have real talent.... -
pretty
has a reli nice rhythm
keep it up
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this is awesome i love it
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it's nice and short, which i like, and it rhymes, which i also like, so... yea... I like it. It flows nicely and doesnt sound forced. Great work.
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Short and sweet with a message of suicide. The way you made it rhyme worked really well (as far as finding words that rhymed and making them flow with the poem). I once wrote a poem similar to this that it reminded me of, except mine was quite a bit longer, but yours works really well being short and to the point.
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