I've always loved you
Those words were true
You were such a great friend
Why did it end?
Anorexia was the worst
That disease must be cursed
I didn't know you'd die
As the months went by
I tried to help you
It wasn't good I knew
Im sorry I couldn't stop it
But I never did quit
I can't believe you're gone
My tears have been drawn
Now I know you're not here,
We no longer live in fear
You helped with my troubles,
You answered on the double
I'm sorry I couldn't help you
But "I love you" still is true
Author notes
DEDICATED TO MOONLIGHTBEAM. REST IN PEACE, LOVE YOU BUNDLES
A contest entry
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Superb
line 12 didn't go with the rytym as much but the overall poem was spectacular and it accuratly states what it feels like to lose someone. I hope the anorexia is not from personal experience. Incredibly good. I would applaud but i do not have enough points.
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wow, very emotional poem, and explains very clearly how you felt. awesome job on this, theres nothing like a poem from the heart
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Aww, this is such a sad piece. I'm sorry for your loss. It is never easy, especially with something like this. You did very well penning your feelings here.
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This depicts the pain of loss so well- your rhyming and flow are great too pandy.. I'm sorry for the loss, but I'm sure that person is in a better place now - So many people enter our lives and then all of a sudden they are gone, leaving that emptiness inside and the footsteps on the sands of time ... Great write.. never stop writing
Love, ~ Lonely
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Aww, sorry for your loss. This poem is so beautiful! You never know how much you need someone until they're gone. The last stanza was really beautiful. great write
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thats so BEAUTIFUL! it's so deep and I really liked the way you expressed yourself through strong wording and the flow of the poem is truly magical.
i especially enjoyed these stanzas:
I can't believe you're gone
My tears have been drawn
Now I know you're not here,
We no longer live in fear
You helped with my troubles,
You answered on the double
I'm sorry I couldn't help you
But "I love you" still is true
thanks
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It's always so hard when you lose someone you love. And I agree with you that the saying "When you left, a part of me did too," really doesn't hit home until it happens to you. Sorry for your loss. Great write and keep up the great work.
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Wow that was amazing. I really liked it. That was really deep. I like how you expressed your feelings. Keep up the good work.
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This is a very sad poem. Filled with lots of raw emotion. You are a great friend to have. I clicked on this because of the title. I was not disappointed in any way. Blessed Be! ~~S & M~~
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Your sorrow just pours out in this piece.
"You helped with my troubles,
You answered on the double
I'm sorry I couldn't help you
But "I love you" still is true "
Really sad,It's a beautiful dedication though.
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I'm so sorry for your loss. It is a beautiful write to honor someone, though. I am deeply touched by this so thank you for sharing.
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This was so amazing.....I truly wish we never had to know how it feels to lose someone we love! God Bless you for such a wonderful tribute! Hugs! Marie
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I'm truly sorry for your loss
I do know the pain of losing your best friend; the emptiness left just doesn't seem to be able to be filled ever again...I am deeply sorry
Very emotion packed write; I'm sure your friend would love it
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its a beautiful poem
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This poem leave me speechless, because it is so good. I know how it feels to lose someone because I have had lost some of my best friends and family members. So when you think of this person from time to time, just remember that you are not alone with losing someone.
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This poem is full of emotion and is beutifully written.
I can imagine how you feel. One of my closest friends had Anorexia. She died from it ): Imiss her alot but the time we did have was greatly spent. Great poem! keep up the good work.
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This is sweeter and sadder beyond words.
Wherever she is, I bet she's reading this, and smiling so much. I would.
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Thank you so much Naz. I can always count on you being here for me.
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That's ok
I'll always try my best to be!
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