You helped me pick up the peices of my heart,
but for all the pieces we couldn't find,
You offered part of yours.
Now you're part of me,
I can't live without you.
Then you left.
And took half my heart with you.
I know that half still beats.
Our friendship still lives.
But that half will never be replaced.
Author notes
(FOR CONTEST JUDGE) I wrote this to my Best friend, (we are dating now thanks to this) and please go to my author page for more in depth on this... it's the first paragraph
A contest entry
- A Poem that Changed a Life by Timothy Cameron.
700 points, ended March 19, 2008, 9 entries
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this is about a really close friend of mine, she really helped me find myself, She even introduced me to Christianity, she changed my life, then she had to move, now i might never see her again
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Very good take on that contest, I think. Very good, indeed.
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Well written and shows the magic of friendship found within the beating of two hearts.
Even friends who move on, will remain deeply held when they leave such a mark on you.
well done.
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keep in touch with her, if that doesn't work, just remember the lessons she taught you. This poem is beautifully written. short and to the point. Maybe a little more background in the poem itself, than we can feel for the narrator more.
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i can relate to this. its a real good poem
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oh. i have experienced this one too many times, this is really touching. I like it... the ending was really good. good job. =]
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