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Sacred Storm

I am reaching for a reaction
upon crimson cries
I am lusting leisure’s
upon sounds of silk
I am racing the red
upon a lover’s look
I am breathlessly bold
upon a merciless milk

I am scorching satisfied
upon an ignited impression
I am truthfully touched
upon ethereal eruption
I am blissfully born
upon madness mystified
I am favoring a fever
upon created combustion

I am completely content
upon this fine form
I am shamelessly spent
upon this sacred storm

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  • DayDreamMuse
    January 26, 2008

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    I like this construction. It builds up emotion and power. Nice job with the metaphors in this poem. It was an interesting work overall.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    January 17, 2008

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    This is brimming with metaphor and color.
    I especially liked the last six lines.
    Wonderful display that is filled with flames.
    Blue


  • BarefootSoul
    January 15, 2008
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    wonderful metaphors and rich in red as the contest holder hoped for...good luck!


  • Amber Lee
    January 14, 2008
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    WoW!This is really beautiful!