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The fragrant blossoms bloom elegantly
as the skies hover gently through.
In chorus, the birds twitter gallantly
and the tender breeze blows, breaking through.
As the skies hover gently through,
sunshine blazes in summery rays
and the tender breeze blows, breaking through
yet the warmth sojourns to upraise.
Sunshine blazes in summery rays;
the vibrant leaves then tarries to fall
yet the warmth sojourns to upraise
wherein barren limbs seem to appall.
The vibrant leaves then tarries to fall
replaced by arctic snowflakes
wherein barren limbs seem to appall
as the frozen sanctuary again awakes.
Replaced by arctic snowflakes,
in chorus, the birds twitter gallantly.
As the frozen sanctuary again awakes
the fragrant blossoms bloom elegantly.
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Author notes
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PatheticKt is my screen name.
The options i chose are:
#1 - Winter
#2 - Spring
#3 - Autumn
#4 - Summer
and #5 could apply if you want ^^'
anyway, this is a pantoum and here's the explanation from shadowpoetry.com
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Pantoum
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines
of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a
new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing
quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and
fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of
the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first
line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
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anyway, hope you guys like this poem coz i like it since it's wonderful and rewarding to write a form poetry like this ^^
see you all!!! n.n
In a list
A contest entry
- 154th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended January 15, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let Your Form Shine by 2lullabyhaven.
475 points, ended April 21, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PANTOUM - A form for all seasons by Suzianne.
550 points, ended August 17, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Write Frenzy by FloridaGatorQueen.
700 points, ended September 13, 60 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - -SPING/SUMMER/WINTER/AUTUMN-season contest-PW allowed- by Heva Feva.
675 points, ended October 15, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is very beautifully written. I love the way you explain each season. I could picture each change in my mind. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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skillfully written with some great rhyme
well done and thanks for entering -
thanks for the beautiful entry. i really like the form and imagery youve used, but i'm not so keen on the length, i think it drags on just a little.
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This is quite a lovely pantoum here, you captured some definative beauty in this one, best to you
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Seasonal Wonders is quite nice. When I read it aloud, the alliteration was a bit heavy-handed, but that might just be the way I hear it. I especially like, “frozen sanctuary again awakes.” That is very effective.
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Well done.
Your poem is quite nice. I wish you all the best in the contest. -
congrats on the trophies. This is a great pantoum. The form is nice and the rhyme is sold. All in all an enjoyable read
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I love how you beautifully decribed the seasons beginning with spring & ending with winter.
Gorgeous imagery & filled with emotion.
Loved it!!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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lovely poetry.
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Thank you for this interesting form, and for entering it into my contest
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Beautiful!
You have painted the four seasons well with elegant imagery! This is quite a challenging form (or so it seems to me); I would need to make a template for myself to attempt it. Thank you for sharing this and for your entry. -
Such a pretty picture painted! I can hear the birds Great poem, best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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Very nice! Takes you through all the seasons with an abundance of imagery! Good luck in the contest!
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This was beautiful. I adored the rhyme scheme and the descriptiveness of each season was wonderful. Thank you so much for this fresh piece, I enjoyed it very much.
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