This Poem Sucks But You Cant Blame Me For Trying.......
Through the mist of the storm
My love will show
Ill follow your sweet voice
Wherever it may go
My love gets stronger
Day by day
All i want
Are our paths to stay
Your beuaty is a rare site
As you sit in the rays of light
It is truley an amazing site
How far can i love you
Never shall i know
I love you beyond love
If only you would know
I saw you
And didn't think twice
I thought you must have been an angel
From the sky
I linger in the room waiting for you
Look inside your heart
And learn everything
About you
The rising sun does not start my day
Only you makes the darkness go away
When i grasp you in my arms
I cannot help the way i feel
I looked inside of you
And saw everything that keeps my heart
From becoming still
Your eyes are made of honey
But when stare i melt away
I will not cheat i will not leave
Or never shall i accept defeat
I shall fight with every breathe i have
Just to keep you in my hand
For i cant help the way i feel
For the pain i shall never reveal
BUt even than my love will never end
But only grow with each day that ends
To be with you till the day I die
Has always been a dream of mine
Schlottie I Love you
Kiba&Kagome Forever
A contest entry
- Love/Heartbreak by DeathlyAngel.
450 points, ended January 31, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Old Fashioned Love by Dorcha Runda.
300 points, ended February 6, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring It All by Simply Simple.
1800 points, ended February 26, 2008, 120 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What would you write to her? by xHannahrexiax.
500 points, ended March 1, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Never ever ever say your work sucks!!! Okay then... not that I have done that... here goes.
This was a really wonderful poem, so filled with raw emotion and thoughts. It was creatively worded and captivating. Great write. -
No of course can't blame you for trying. To me, no poem sucks if it's from the heart, that's the most important thing.
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There's a lot of sucky poetry out there, but this definitely does not fall under that category.
The rising sun does not start my day
Only you makes the darkness go away.
That was my favourite bit...very creative. Overall an absolute joy to read. Good luck in the contest
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It doesn't suck at all. It's very sweet. I love it. Thanks for your entry and good luck to you.
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So sweet. Great job. Good luck
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Welcome To AllPoetry
Sometimes feelings and emotions can suck, but writing about them doesn't. Once you have poured out your thoughts, just go back and check for grammar, spelling, punctuation, and things like that. It helps the flow and allows the reader to receive what you are saying better.
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