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All of You

I want to feel your soul,
to taste it on my lips.
I want to go where your dreams want to take me.
Can I break through your thin disguise,
to the passion in your eyes,
abolish all your suffering
and erase a thousand lies?

I want to dream of you,
and those arms that hold me tight,
to wake and hear your breathing
for an eternity of nights.
Will you ever just let go
and reveal your wounded heart?
I want to know it's me you long for,
all the more when we're apart.

I want the only thing between us
to be the love that keeps us strong.
I want our every night together
to be a lifetime long.
I can surpass your expectations,
and fulfill your deep desires,
if you let me drown your sorrows
and ignite enduring fires.

I want to feel your soul,
to taste it on my lips.
I want to go where your dreams want to take me.
I want my place to be beside you
as we travel through this life,
to be the one you count on,
your lover, friend, and wife.

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  • z etoile
    September 16, 2008

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    Well I enjoyed these three poems. They sorta told the story themselves. The first poem "All of You" I enjoyed about your feelings that you had for him at the time to be his wife at that time you were pouring out your soul and it shows in the poem.
    The second poem "consolation" I loved the last lines
    I'd hate to
    see the alcohol in your
    breath
    soil my
    Cinderella dress.


    And the third poem "Gone" seemed like it was your way of letting go of something that was not good for you. Yes you still love them we always do but not if it harms you. And I am happy to see that you met someone that is good for you.
    Outstanding poems and thank you for entering my contest.


  • PoetryStar2
    April 14, 2008
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    this is good i loved it vey romantic u two are a good couple u fit together like a sick and glue


  • Great Cthulhu
    March 15, 2008
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    Very Romantic!

    This is a pleasant piece of love. Such a lovely, devoted vision you've created. I love the rhyme scheme you used, it almost looked random at first, caught me off guard with a nice surprise. I really enjoyed the imagery in the first stanza (my favorite). Excellent job, thanks for entering and good luck!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 29, 2008

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    This is very beautiful and expressive.
    I like the way you make me feel how you feel all over again.


  • leander Moderators member
    February 21, 2008

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    A crystal clear message you radiate throughout this poem, a tender and soothing message in fact.
    The rhyme is done superbly again, though the flow is a little bit wobbly here and there

    Leander


  • SilverInk
    February 19, 2008

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    This was well written except for the one cliche "ignite enduring fires". That's extremely over used nowadays and I think anything else would have sounded better. Now for the rest of your piece, I really liked it. The rhythm was spot on and the rhyme worked excellently. The message was also really great. Good luck in the contest! *adds as finalist*

  • angelelectra
    January 22, 2008

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    Beautiful

    that was a beautiful beautiful write! Your words hold varying degrees of intensity and different facets of love. Something i can really relate to! Strong and powerful imagery.
    Keep up the good work!
    Love,
    Neera~


  • SomeGirlYouKnew
    January 18, 2008

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    i like how the rhyme scheme isnt completely set. it varies a bit from stanza to stanza. i also like how this invokes many senses in understanding what the poem is about, and its not just simply words on a page.

    this was a great write. keep it up.


  • Rheea gold member
    January 14, 2008
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    This is very lovely, Good luck =)

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