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Backalley

 

Frozen fishbowls

trapped in time.

 

Feathers flutter, perpetually,

locked chicken coops,

roosting hens.

 

Baby carriages lost

on steaming city streets.

Oriental masses

gathered 'round hissing woks.

Fish heads browned in boiling oil.

 

The masses shrug,

exspendable children,

forgotten in wicker baskets

that are sodden with rain.

Soft soiled blankets

with embroidered designs.

Left on government steps. 

 

Cities of children sleeping

on cold orphanage beds.

Sobs in the night.

 

Some babies sent away,

too many forgotten to count.

They join Neverland

where they won't grow up.

That's too long to live.

 

Mugs of Ramen warm small hands,

stringy noodles, gristly bits of meat,

all mixed in a greasy broth.

 

Two nations of street children

that never get older.

Succumbing to the molester's hands,

pirates of forbidden objects, 

sold children.

 

The cruelness of Neverland

staining white sheets of innocence

that cannot be washed by time.

The lost boys and girls

that will die young.

 

Peter's funeral

is just forgotten.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • paw-writer silver member
    June 2

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    Powerful!

    Wow! You have done an amazing job with this poem! This is such an important topic that needs more attention. I am moved by the emotion expressed here. It is tragic and sad that so many innocent children suffer so much. Nice work! Blessings, Patty


  • BellaD
    January 25
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    Great job!

    Excellent writing and response to the prompt. Congratulations on your GOLD!

  • Flames-of-Furey
    January 20

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    um cool! like the way you twisted this characters fortune to a desparate tragedy where the children remain children and die like children in combat with no loving mothers and always labled LOST! fantastic
    this poem would only have been better is you had picked up the negative title of NEVER!land never again will the hugs of mothers reign Never will the children love or cry in pain wow yes very effective well done. this poem could win by far.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 15

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    So sad and so true

    When the world by abuse and those who do nothing to stop it we are all to blame for thier abuse hunger and shame . Talked about and tears fall yet the child is still lost after all on the day we are asked why what will we say then

    . Rewarded 4


  • frownsnfreckles
    January 15

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    This is a wonderful poem. So much thought and careful observation has gone into it. The imagery brings the scene alive and the emotion is one of indignance and deep sadness at this terrible neglect. Sensitive and very well written. Well done!

    . Rewarded 4


  • IrishGypsyRose gold member
    January 15

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    it was....amazing

    I never would have thought of "Neverland" in those terms, but you used the images of the lost boys and girls so well and so sadly that I found it painfully touching. Good luck on the contest, hope you win.

    . Rewarded 4


  • KitLynn
    January 15
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    That was just... beyond amazing. I can't even find words good enough for it...

  • I can't not leave a real comment on this one. This is beautiful, breathtaking. You've done exactly what I asked and made it amazing. Great work.
  • Your character is Peter Pan.
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