My fantasy has always been
To be fought over by two men.
My lovers locked in combat’s dare;
I wave my hanky in the air.
Listen while my strange tale I share
of life showered with kisses fair.
What sin comes of twin caressing?
Two soft, silky faces pressing?
Ladies, never make my goof
two suitors underneath one roof
When lovers are father and son
The battle is so dearly won.
The baby kicked; his father smacked.
The house is wrecked; the dishes cracked.
The floors and walls I now must sweep
as my loves lie in weary sleep.
The truth is that my fantasy
is simply more housework for me.
Listen well all you fair misses.
Life’s hell when men fight for kisses.
Author notes
check out the link, so my poem will make more sense
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NQ96B9POB6w
A contest entry
- Ruthy's first contest with Bluebook by Hashnah Sheviatte.
570 points, ended February 1, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
anonymous contest - please don't mention my name in comments
Comments
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Congratulations!!!
So very deserving of gold!!!
Yay times a thousand!
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hello
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To Fun
Wow this had lots of twist and turns to it. This was a fun read and you did this poem so excellently. The title My Dream Come True is perfect for your poem then the first line, My fantacy has always been, then the last line, Life's hell when men fight for kisses. Simply just more housework for me, FUNNY!! Loved it and thank you for sharing with me.
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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This is very well written, and I like it's flow. it is a nice poem overall, However, I get the feeling that You may someday end up on Jerry Springer if Your fantasy comes true.
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Interesting twist! A little rought rhythm-wise I think, but enjoyable.
I thought the first stanza was funny. I could see this melodramatic lady waving her handkerchief. 
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ha ha
very nice take . . humor works well . . liked "The battle is so dearly won" and "Life's hell when men fight for kisses" . . good job !
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Amazing!
i love it! -
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Oh yeeeeeeeeeeh! HAH! Wonderfully depicted with a slant on the pros and cons of such a mix as this.
If it were legal, ..uh. never mind! LOL
I love your polished meter. The iambs are nearly perfect throughout!
I hope you win placement. A worthy entry. Thank you for excellence~
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This is hilarious!!! and well written to boot
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First thank you for you consider my invitation...So this is your link,..
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NQ96B9POB6w
Pardon me for I have waited you so much,...Goodluck in the contest,.. Feel free and have fun,... With God's will,..
Ruthy
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