Sweet sip
Delicate rich
Purple ripe promises
Dancing on lips, their perfumed kiss
Delights
A contest entry
- chanson: songs of love and wine by Nicolette.
900 points, ended January 20, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice
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Sensual and sweet! I really could see it all... so great imagery poet!
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Thank you sir
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Wow, this is your first cinquain? Well, this is very well done - good work. I agree with my co-judge about this one being sensual and sweet ad I really liked the "purple ripe promises" - something tantalizing and mysterious about that! I also like the way each line makes an individual statement, yet still allows for flow. I would prefer someone not to capatilize each line, but that is just my personal preference. You did very well here!
Thank you for this lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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Baie dankie Nicolette. Enjoyed writing this one very much
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This is really pretty. It is flirtatious and cool and smart. I like the suggestion of promises, of fragrance, of kisses, all things wine and love hold in common. Very effective, complex and elegant metaphor at several levels: lips, romance, wine, love. I love your third line... excellent. effective. sensual and sweet, like a perfume but more than perfume and wine or either combined. very very cool ,,,Moqui
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Thanks Moqui,
First attempt at a cinquain...I like them!! Thanks to you and Nicolette for introducing me to this style of poetry.
Lucy
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