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Listening to the Blue Dog

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It was a blue dog day

one of those afternoons

when the sky hangs in a droop

and snores in steady beats

against the window pane

 

So I just lay

with my mind floating

in yellow

and listened to the silence

behind the clatter

 

And it moaned

in soft-tongued songs

a slow quiet rhythm

beating against my breast

for some recognition

 

So I listened

while it sang me to bed

in the quiet of the day

with no one around

to witness

~~~~~

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Image: One of George Rodrique's Blue Dog paintings

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  • Night Hope gold member
    January 19, 2008
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    "And it moaned

    in soft-tongued songs
    a slow quiet rhythm
    beating against my breast
    for some recognition"

    "Mama told me there'd be days like this, there'd be days like this, my mama said." Love it, Madame Librarian. Always do. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. Wander Lea


  • Keyser Soze
    January 18, 2008

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    I love the imagery here, though adding kinesthetics would have made it more powerful. Thank you for making me tired, lol.
    Thank you for your entry.


  • Metaphorist
    January 14, 2008

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    Great imagery though not quite what the contest holder was looking for. This was a mundane moment personified, but you didn't use it to describe yourself. He wanted something like "I am a blue dog day...". Good try anyway.