I lay here alone.
I lay here because you are gone,
Now I just have my computer and
my radiohead playing on repeat.
There is nothing anymore, everything I was is gone now.
People cannot see it, because I am a good actor.
They think Im funny. They think Im happy.
They don't know me,
because I have never been either of those things.
I just finished writing the letter,
I stopped writing with my tears.
Its a been a year,
and I don't know who I am anymore.
My mind is obsessed with these thoughts of pain.
It cant find any light.Maybe, there was never light.
Maybe, It was not love.
Maybe, I am crazy.
I will press play again,
because the feeling wont go away.
A contest entry
- Dark Love Gone Bad by lordmalvok.
450 points, ended January 19, 2008, 9 entries
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am I alone?
Comments
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love songs
I hate them, but I always have to listen to them and it makes it worse!! awww no this is a great write and a deep view was expressed.
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ok....first off....listen to radiohead much?
lol
This packs emotion...feels real...and painful. The kind of pain that is silent...not too dramatic...the mellow tone is what gives it such a genuine feel.
nice job.
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Very moving. Maybe you have changed it since the comments below, because it doesn't lack form.
I think most of us can relate to this and I think it's written well.
"They don't know me,
because I have never been either of those things."
I love these lines, great job.
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Very nice. I like this alot. It's in a different style than what I go for usually but I get the flow easily. It does flow nicely. Thanks for entering.
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Aww,I know the feeling...it tugs at your heart;tears you apart...
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Please reformat this into a poetry style and then I will judge it. Thanks.
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Very good.
i have actually been in a situation exactly like this. right down to the music you were listening to. amnesiac to be exact.
i love this, even though i usually am not into things that lack form. a very good write to be sure.
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