I am sorry I am not perfect
Or everything you've always wanted,
But I know I made you happy,
For your smile never faded
When you held me in your arms;
Your lips grew more tender with each kiss;
And the way you said "I love you"
Grew more sencere by the day.
You can not tell me
You didn't mean it
When you said we were meant to be
because I know you are the only one
I want to hold
As I'm drifting off to sleep.
There's nothing wrong
With Loving me.
Open your eyes
And see what you are giving away.
Perhaps, one day
You will realzie your mistake
Of letting me go,
And I'll be waiting
To return to the security of your loving arms.
I will forgive
All that's been done,
And I will hold on as tight as ever.
Although my love for you is eternal
I can not wait forever.
So, I give you three months to the day
before I lose all hope,
And finally let you go.
If no response is sent
I will surely weep,
But only for a moment,
For my life awaits
An emptiness which may never be full again.
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In the first stanza
And the way you said "I love you"
Grew more sencere by the day.
sencere should be sincere
Four stanzas from the end
You will realzie your mistake
Of letting me go,
And I'll be waiting
To return to the security of your loving arms.
realzie should be realize
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Now that we got that out of the way, your poem was full of raw emotion at a few parts so I wonder if you were upset when you wrote this. I'm sure the answer was yes. Either way just fix the spelling errors and you should be set. Keep it up
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It is sincere that you would wait a time for someone special. This is a big theme in your life, finding love. Seems that way for most everyone.
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Wonderful
Very well done. And so creative. You did a great job.
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I really liked it, it was full of emotion and love, with an undertone of deep hurt.
Seeing as on your profile you say you are a grammar nazi, I'm going to be a spelling/typo nazi and point out that 3rd stanza, 6th line, should be 'realize'. (well, if I was going to be totally correct I'd say 'realise' but you're american so I suppose I have to let it slide).
Erm yeah, sorry for rambling, good write and yeah sorry.
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I really like this poem. It is way better than all of mine
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nive poem I really liked it alot
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heart wrenchingly beautiful
The words are like the toughts of every one that ever got dumped by the one that they have had the most feelings for in their entire lives and there just waiting for the response that says that that person is coming back. I do hope that your love does come back and relize that haveing something soo good isn't too good and that leaving you was a mistake. If not I hope that some day your heart does heal and you can move on if not wholey then partially. KillerRain.
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this was intense.
i love how it has no actual
structure,
there's some rhyme but it doesnt seem planned or forced.
i really enjoyed this.
♥ ♥
[[alexsis]]
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Wow... I got shivers down my spine reading this... reminded me of my last ex... Great write, so filled with emotions, i could feel them.
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