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Broken

lashes break
a chain of glass
fracturing
my heart
forever

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  • SMario15
    January 15, 2008
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    nice poem annie rose

  • Newbie50
    January 14, 2008

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    Rosemarie, This one broke my heart with the intenseness of your words. Five short lines that had the impact of a mac truck in full gear. Never get disappointed when I stop by your work and I haven't seen anything from you lately. It's good to see you writing again. Keep smilin. Jeff

  • Foreverstars
    January 14, 2008
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    Wow, this is really sad. It makes me want to put it back together. Great poem.


  • Floorboards
    January 14, 2008

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    Wow

    Wowzers, the imagery is absolutely startling, Rosemarie. Fluttering eyelashes and tears are what springs to mind, it's really got me thinking, very emotional too. Well done again my friend,
    great work, I love it.
    Alex.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    January 14, 2008

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    Lovely metaphor and so deeply touching...strength and sadness in brevity...wonderful imagery.
    Best always!


  • you make me smile
    January 14, 2008
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    Simple but powerful. What a great write!!


  • penman gold member
    January 13, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Great take on the prompt.


  • PinkPony
    January 13, 2008

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    UUMMM! A lovely poem, very beautiful images of sadness.


  • HeavenScent4U
    January 13, 2008

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    This is so sad best of luck in the contest sweetie. be well and be blessed


  • crimsondew
    January 13, 2008
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    Wonderfully written...All the best!


  • jcat gold member
    January 13, 2008
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    Such sorrow in these words!!! I love your take on the prompt!!! Best of luck in the contest...

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    January 13, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in to my contest goodluck. Best wishes and much love always


  • BluRosePoet8488
    January 13, 2008

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    OOOO... WOW! It says lots with very lttle! Keep the ink flowing and good luck! Love and hugs...
    ~Donna~

  • Wings of an angel2
    January 13, 2008

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    Rosemarie, this is a great write you penned here. So much said in few words. Very sad. Good luck in the contest!

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