Destiny entwines all who seek it~~
And all who don't.
Destiny embraces your will to live~~
To die.
Destiny is the love for following your path~~
Or not.
Destiny is your best friend~~
In a ghostly glowing veil
Of ideas
And the
Sun.
Destiny loves light in all enlightened ways~~
Destiny is light.
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(shinebeamflashglaregleamglowblazeradiateflickersparkleglimmershimmerbrightnesslove)
Author notes
I hope you like it. I am eleven years old.
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now ? (Round 6) by just mercedes.
500 points, ended January 19, 2008, 4 entries
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Well done. This is a very good peice one to enjoy like a little perfect grape. Well done!!!!
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Excellent poem and beautiful take on the prompt! congrats to you on the gold! ~blessings always~ Trisha
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Perfect! This is a great response to the prompt, and I love the way you have presented the poem and used calligraphy concepts to set it out. My favourite line /Destiny is light/
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this is really good for your age. It was so well written. I love the metaphore you make on lines 7-12.
Destiny is your best friend~~
In a ghostly glowing veil
Of ideas
And the
Sun.
The only thing that I would change is when you say in a ghostly glowing veil I would write dressed in a ghostly glowing veil filled with ideas and the shimmering light of the sun. Well tell me if you like that better. w/e. Why am I trying to correct such a beautifully written poem? W/evs great poem =]
"stay golden"
gabi
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It's pretty, but I don't really like ot change my poems after they're written-
Thanks anyway!
Vivien
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