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*~ Phantom of Love's Opera *~

 

 

 

 

 

 

Her notes were taken by birds to build nests
within branches where she sat, once
underneath a shade, against a shadow
of her loneliness.

She dreamt of him with opened eyes
but held back crystalline tears
because she was all dryed out.

Phantom of Love's Opera-

who waltzed around her mind
and bowed before years of shyness
peeled back closed petals.

His shoes tapped, left marks on marble
where feminine feet traced
masculine steps in tandem.

Nobody could replace the thoughts
asleep in its bed of passion
heated by his touch.

Another page turned and taken-

into skies, over clouds it skipped
passed the suitors with pickup lines
beyond bar cliche'.

Originality frozen in ice-

some have melted, been dug up in dreams
and given life a second chance to live
within her own shadow, complete.

It was verbally said also written-

The gentlemen grazed in pastures
hidden behind morality's hedges
within another woman's basement.

Behind doors double locked also bolted-

so he could not be seen [like the elusive Sasquatch]
by prying eyes that prayed nightly
for him to be real.











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Title Prompt~
Where Have ALL The Good Men Gone?

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  • HaleyMary
    January 17, 2008

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    I liked the second last stanza the best. It made me think of how all the good guys seem to be taken. Congrats on winning the gold.


  • Mirthryl
    January 15, 2008

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    Loved the "notes taken by birds to build nests." Nice Sasquatch similie. Engaging, tho' sad story, seemed to cross generations of time. Congratulations on the gold!


  • Sandygram silver member
    January 15, 2008

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    Congratulations on winning Gold. You have penned a lovely poem well deserving of Gold!!! Very nice imagery ands a pleasure to read. You take care, Sandy .


  • penman gold member
    January 15, 2008
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    Excellent

    Oh my precious was a fantastic poem. So worthy of the gold. Congratulations.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    January 14, 2008

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    Gorgeous hun, you have a wonderful story telling ability in you style hun and it is not more evident than in this piece... bravo

    Karen


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    January 14, 2008

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    Great poem and thought it was done beautifully! Especially like the bold heading and the many facets of your poem. Good luck in the contest!


  • StarEyes
    January 13, 2008

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    Holy Smokes!!!!!! Girl this is incredible!! I adore this one...... There is something in this one, that sounds like it is right out of MY dreams.....

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nettie


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 13, 2008

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    Oh you go, girl!
    Another fine sharing from your pen, sweetie
    I so enjoy reading you!
    All the best to you in this contest!
    Love ya much!

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