I love the scent of fear and the smell of death
The feeling of power and the cooling of sweat
Overpower this bitch, I'll eat your fucking soul
The thought of destruction, I'm beginning to drool
Terror on the rise, heartbeat pounding
Cascaded by hatred, anger blinding
I'm the final fucking thing that you're ever going to see
Start fucking screaming while I violate you with ease
You wanted it like a whore, how does it feel
Will you cry out for more as I force you to squeal?
The blood pours out as your body ejects the blade
Without removing our clothes I just got laid
The wounds on your body are still warm and wet
You wanted it rough, this is what you get
You think I'd ever put my fucking cock in you?
I'm the fucking devil and I'm coming for you.
I can hear your fucking heart, it's a rhythmic cry
I can tell you want more by the look in your eyes
I carry you away, into our dark bedroom
As you pour out on the floor I'm planning your doom
Don't fucking move, this is my favourite part
If you start to struggle I'll eat your fucking heart
With your blood still on my hands I cut my own throat
I can see the lust in your eyes as fate's re-wrote
It's time for what I want, I want slow
Our blood mixes on the sheets before hitting the floor
As my blood pours over your body I feel you come alive
I hand you the blade, hurry before one of us die
With a powerful thrust you push it through my chest
I kiss you gently while I still have something left
With you plunging the blade deeper into my flesh
I collapse beside you in a bleeding bloody fucking mess
You get on top, gentle touch on my cheek
You place the blade over my heart prepared to go deep
With a smile and a wink, you put it in slow
Just like I want it, I love the way I go
With your final breath, you fall to my lust
Fucked and Cut like you asked for it rough!
Author notes
You have to read the whole thing to the end to understand. It's my twisted rendition of a love story, i hope you enjoy. I do understand how some people would not see the "love" part to this
"She ricochets and you don't notice"
A contest entry
- Give me all you've got by Canis Lupus.
1800 points, ended January 28, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Adult : Bleed With Me by SchizoChic.
450 points, ended January 15, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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475 points, ended July 13, 2008, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOVE ME DEAD by TwoFacedPsycho.
450 points, ended October 4, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrite contest - round 1 by serenity silvermoon.
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good
kind of dark and twisted in love and blood.
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I thought about the smell of blood and death with your poem: death, yech, what an awful smell: revolting; but fresh blood, so full of life, sweet, yet deep, soft, yet overpowering of all other smells in the room; it always makes me hungry. Anyway, back to your poem, hooorah for the chick, sounds like the boy in this flick was a little pussywhipped.
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think i must be sick coz i think this is fantastic... and i happen to love the taste of blood and being bitten
yes i can see the love in this piece... athough 'tainted love' would be a good theme song for it lol
hugs,
georgie,
xxx
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Yes I did
Sometimes love become so deep one cant live without the other and they would rather die than be parted . Sad it is that they couldnt continue the love they shared without the violence should they feel like they were to be parted death doesnt keep love alive only life can do this .Good write here
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a very angry write here my fav stanza is the last
"It's time for what I want, I want slow
Our blood mixes on the sheets before hitting the floor
As my blood pours over your body I feel you come alive
I hand you the blade, hurry before one of us die
With a powerful thrust you push it through my chest
I kiss you gently while I still have something left
With you plunging the blade deeper into my flesh
I collapse beside you in a bleeding bloody fucking mess
You get on top, gentle touch on my cheek
You place the blade over my heart prepared to go deep
With a smile and a wink, you put it in slow
Just like I want it, I love the way I go
With your final breath, you fall to my lust
Fucked and Cut like you asked for it rough! -
Dark can't even begin to describe this. As disgusting as others would find it, I couldn't help but read it with my eyes bugged out. I honestly wanted to read more! Great job, dude!
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Oh my, this is very dark and powerful! The power just never lets up, the poem screams through disturbing images to end in a crumpled heap on the floor.
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how is there no love there? haha. i LOVED it! great job and thanx for entering!
*hugs* tay.
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Sick and twisted! My kind of mind! Not everyone can see the erotica in those words though! I did however, catch the "love story". For sure you met my requirements and rules!! Awsome, twisted job!!
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Wow I'm kind of speechless here! Very, creepy but in a very good way!! I mean it was sick and twisted but deep and beautifully crazy lol!
What a morbid love tale!! Great job!
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well this was seriously creepy but thats ok. ummm ya. don't over use the "f" word it takes aways form the meaning when all you see it that word everywhere. still brilliant just creepy.
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You used the words death, Blood, to many times, if you had only used it once or twice wouldnt even notice, very good poem, it would have been good for the next contest im working on but you didnt fallow the instructions. But verry great write!!!
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This doesn't have a name in the author's notes.. please fix that and then comment me back when you do.... then I can put a name to the score
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Metal
My God, it's like Disturbed meets Cradle Of Filth meets Slipknot meets KORN...
Wow...it was actually okay to read, just not where I am right now...I understand the "love" part, too! Nicely written!
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Thank you for your comment, it was obviously very sincere. But i'll let you know from my artistic standpoint, I take great insult in being compared to Disturbed, Korn, Cradle of Filth, and Slipknot. None of those bands have talent near mine and Cory Taylor actually told me to my face during a jam session that he fears the day he ever has to try to please a crowd after my band has had there way with them (Yes, I've met Cory Taylor and all the boys from slipknot).
I understand you didn't mean any insult, i just wanted to let you know that i do appreciate that you enjoy my work and compare it to some of your favorite bands, but i take great insult especially knowing that those bands and the writers that work for them can't hold a candle to myself or my bandmates.
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ah...this was rather scary. very scary. you said "fuck" more than a rapper. whatever floats your boat i guess. good job.
good luck!
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Think it's going to do any good? I mean you did ask for a psycho right? is this crazy enough for you?
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uhhh...yeah. it's psycho enough allright. definetly. it's prolly the most psychotic one i've read so far...
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oh thank you so much, i hope it does well
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A wowzer piece! I loved it all, dark, disturbing, violent, sheer brilliance! Very well penned indeed, good luck in the contest with it
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well I fucking love it. One tad thing I noticed, you misspelled clothes as cloths... but it was great! i loved.
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Holy mother fucking cow, this was awesome, though not really sexual, and if I found it so I wouldn't admit that would I? lmao but nonethelese this was a wicked write.
Good luck
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