He said that he loved me
and swore it to be true
but now we disagree
and I dont know what to do
I wanna stay
And he wants to go
I want to Cry
And he doesnt know
He said he'd never do it
He'd never leave me behind
and there he goes, he's walking away
and Im about to lose my mind
I want to stay
And he wants to go
I want to cry
And he doesnt know
I told myself I wouldnt
I wouldnt fall for him
stupid me I did it agian
and now look what mess im in..
I want to stay
and he wants to go
I want to cry
and he doesnt know
Now I know hes gonna..
He's Gonna Leave me alone
hes gonna say goodbye
away our life is blown
I wanted to stay
and he wanted to go
Now I want to die
and he doesnt even know
Was it worth it at all???
Author notes
Yea, Exactly what I said!... god!
A contest entry
- tears, fears, and everything inbetween by nobodys-girl.
700 points, ended May 4, 2008, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think? tell me what you truley thought of when you read this...
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this reminds me of my parents : ( but it is a really amazing poem. thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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This makes me sad. I know how badly it hurts when the person who care for leaves you. It feels like your heart is being ripped out. I'm so sorry that this has happened to you. I know that it feels like the end of the world now, but time will heal your broken heart. I promise.
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Really Good
Yes this is a realy good written poem I loved your rhyme scheem and I saw nothing that seemed force and the flow was so smoothe.
If you decided to put this to music #1 without a doubt.
In the last verse changing the word "cry" to "Die" I felt realy made this poem.
Thought I would look at some of your work and this one caught my eye and I realy loved it.
return the favor ( I recommend "LOVE LOST" )
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What I thought...
I thought about how it would feel to lose my boyfriend as I read this. You get into a relationship and...You think that it's going to last forever, so your roots are deep, and when they break away, they don't realize that they take a part of you with them.
I love how you repeated:
'I want to stay
And he wants to go
I want to cry
And he doesnt know'
Throughout, that really helped in terms of carving your pain into my heart so I could feel it too. It does make me wonder if this is really all worth it in the end...or maybe it's all just one long goodbye. I wouldn't know, but I say that you live each day as your last, and you know what, your writings reflect who you are; you're a beautiful person, and odds are, he didn't deserve you anyway. *hugs*
Brilliant write.
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So sad when you think you've got everything going for you and then someone breaks your heart. I've been there, I know what you're going through. But, speaking from experience, time heals all wounds. Eventually, someone will come along who will make it all worth it. Be strong till that someone appears. Great write. Very touching.
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