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God's Lungs

My breath is the wind of eternity,
its vapour the echo of God's lungs:
the bellows in creation's cosmic forge.

A contest entry

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    January 17, 2008

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    Very nice. Thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • Congruence
    January 14, 2008

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    Should have expanded it - it's good, the last line, over the top and works well, would like to see this as a longer piece, good though and obviously fits the contest requirements - good luck.

    As i said, wonderful last line.


  • Floorboards
    January 14, 2008

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    Superb little write, Bill, love the opening line especially. Well done and good luck to you,
    regards,
    Alex.


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    January 13, 2008

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    EXCELLENT

    I have just finished reading your entry and wish to tell you just how much i have enjoyed the read.Your take on the picture, and its title are awesome. I tried to pick out a few lines that i liked the most, but simply could not do it, as i love the whole poem. you have penned here a beautiful write, and i wish you all the best in the contest.

    Take care,
    ~Whispers~

    • Bad Bill
      January 13, 2008
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      Thank you, Whispers--I appreciate your kind response to this and for wishing me luck in the contest.

      Cheers,
      Bill

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