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Fresh Start

I breathed my first breath,
Slowly.
Tender chill,
Misty talking,
You had that power.
But I was pale,
Too lifeless.

A contest entry

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  • HeavenScent4U
    February 25, 2008

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    this is both sad and chilling, could have been taken a few ways congrats on the HM. be well and be blessed

  • xTomorrowx
    February 8, 2008

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    This is so short, but so powerful, a beautiful poem...
    Congratulations on the HM, I look forward to reading more of your work.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    January 17, 2008

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    OH... This was so sad. Maybe I misunderstood. But it gave me chills and was very powerful. Thank you so much for you entry.


    Delila


  • Angels Whispers gold member
    January 13, 2008

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    LOVELY

    Hello There,
    I have just finished reading your entry and wish to tell you just how much i enjoyed your poem and to wish you all the best in this contest.

    Take care,
    ~Whispers~