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The Journey.

I feel my femininity,

Enveloping me from deep within,

The essence of motherhood,

Watches over me as I embrace my inner being,

As I blossom from bud to full bloom,

I see my spirit soar to freedom,

Like a butterfly breaking free from its chrysalis,

I close my eyes and listen,

To the sounds of tomorrow emanating from my soul,

From this I learn,

From here I grow,

For you I offer peace!

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  • maa gold member
    August 14

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    now that I am reading your soulful verse a second time, I must admit that I am even more touched by it than I was the first time ... something in me has changed, evolved, deepened, I don't know, but I am perceiving and receiving your words in a much more profound manner ...
    I feel that you have not only honored motherhood and its gifts here, but also the Universal Motherhood (for some it's a deity, mother earth or the divine feminine ...) through your transcendental perception, you are showing us that what is within is without and what is Divine, can also be lived in its manifestation here and now on earth ...

    the line "To the sounds of tomorrow emanating from my soul" brought a vision to me, about shamanic journeying on timelines of possibilities (not just probabilities) until we receive the vision of ourselves healed, whole, luminous, awakened ...

    thank you so much for your precious gift,
    maa

  • Gd66uk gold member
    August 8

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    Beautiful

    You have captured the essence of motherhood quite bueautifully, this poem has its own aura that is a soft glow which surrounds it and makes it warm and heartfelt. Great write


  • paw-writer silver member
    August 3

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    This is a beautiful poem about the wonder and joy of motherhood. Nice job, and so touching. thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty

  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 7
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    Beautifully written with emotion and a sense of awe. Thanks for the great entry. Hugs, Bunny


  • Meigami
    February 3

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    This is perfect, the miracle of birth and reproduction is beautiful. Good luck on being a mom, I'm sure you'll enjoy it plenty! You will teach much as well as learn.

  • Lady Altheia
    February 2
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    Very nice. I think my favorite part was "for you i offer peace. Congrats on your honorable mention.

  • Melodies silver member
    January 17

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    Ah, well penned and beautifully thought out, dear Poet... motherhood is a lovely subject and comes with much to bring fine images to our minds.


  • mystic-angel gold member
    January 16
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    Thank You

    Thanks to everyone who has taken the time to read my poem. I appreciate all the comments and am so very pleased that so many people enjoyed reading it. I hope that you can find comfort and peace from it as this was the intention. I wanted to show that there is more to us than just the outer self that others tend to see. The inner being should always be embraced.
    A huge thanks to Maa for the wonderful painting that was a true inspiration to me and for the trophy and points from a great contest. Please check out her work.
    Blessings to all. xx
    Liz.K

  • CaptainRedd
    January 16

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    Great word choice, the verbs and discpriptions enhance the imagery so much! I like the last three lines the best, they make you sound like you were sophiticatedly deep in thought when you wrote this. Were you? Great job!

    • mystic-angel gold member
      January 16
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      Thanks for the lovely comment, this poem really came from deep within, the last 3 lines were the ones that were really pounding to get out, I actually had them in my head before the beginning so I just had to find a start which is quite unusual for my poems as it's normally the other way round. Glad you liked it.
      Blessings.xx
      Liz K.
  • fairyzion
    January 16

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    Wow! You've got the true essence of the developing compassion of every woman's soul.

    The love and care and trust you put into developing this poem is as honest as you must be. This poem propels me by helping me embrace the true power of women, our gift of creation and the ultimate sacrifice and responsibility that all women, especially mothers, project to others. Thanks for taking a positive lead.


  • thundershushed
    January 16
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    'Twas lovely! Thank you for sharing it with us ^^ And the background fits very well, I think.


  • madamcb
    January 15
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    Very beautiful, full of wisdom and future, thanx, conni
  • davidwright silver member
    January 15
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    Very poignant and thoughtfully done. Nice write - happy trails
  • laurijay gold member
    January 15
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    Nicely written.


  • Bleep7
    January 15
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    Lovely! I love the butterfly reference and "breaking free". Great job!


  • DonnaSanford
    January 15

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    Painted with words!

    I love when a poet can reach within and create a picture in my mind. You have done just that in this work. The flow is perfect. There is a typo though...tomorrow is spelled incorrectly.

    Love it!!!


    • mystic-angel gold member
      January 15
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      Whoops, Thanks for pointing that out. Will change it now. Thanks for the lovely comment too.

  • maa gold member
    January 14
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    your poem resonates very much within my soul and translates the essence of my painting beautifully ... thank you so much for sharing your sensitivity with us ...


    maa


  • crimsondew silver member
    January 13

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    This is very beautiful ....Missed reading your poems...I know you have been around, I think i was a little too involved in other stuff...Wonderful poem.It is like a tribute to women...Bookmarking this.


  • Mystical-Gardenia
    January 13

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    Exquisite!

    Amazing work poet; beautifully orchestrated a tapestry to touch the soul inspired by such a magnificent painting each time I read one of these poems by this picture prompt my spirit feels so uplifted; certainly it is time the artists in all of their forms begin to inspire each other and brighten the world Beautifully done!! Brava!!

    Wishing you much success in the competition!

    ~Myst~


  • poetryality silver member
    January 13

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    Beautiful!

    There is a sense of everlasting freedom; a liberty unmatched on the earthly realm. You have painted a glorious picture here poet, filled with flight, nurturing, and goodness. I wish you the best in the challenge.


    Much Love & Many Blessings ♥

    Renee
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