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Sway

Internal suicide
The bleeding tears of redemption
The blades of truth and lies
Of masochistic intention

Scattered thoughts like shards of glass
Thrashing bodies in a colossal mass
My heartbeat is replaced, by breath taken away
I ground the energy and the sound leads me astray

These writhing bodies surround my soul
Their breaths are mine; I grip control
I breathe in deep, and ground the sound
They sway, I sway; the ocean surrounds

Your atavistic galore will be shattered
By the time it’s through
As the ocean pulls you under
And you surrender bleeding through

But don’t forget that we are all in this together
And if the ocean falls from the earth
And the heavens are pulled away
We will find an ever present slumber
Within the arms of this constant race

Your atavistic galore will be shattered
And by the time it’s through
As the ocean pulls you under
I’ll be the one to believe in you

Until we can no longer breathe
And these unreal fantasies are threads of reality
We’ll bind our broken hearts with trust
And live for immortality

Scattered thoughts like broken glass
Thrashing bodies in a colossal mass
My heartbeat is replaced by breath taken away
Just please…Don’t leave me to drown…
I’ll stay
I’ll stay…
I’ll stay…
…I’ll…Sway…

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  • Aiyoris Maryian
    January 13, 2008

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    I am honored that you would comment on my poem because this is absolutely breaktaking. I could see everything in my head. The first stanza is my favorite. It is beautiful, very Gothic. Thanks so much for sharing this.


    • Rogue
      January 15, 2008
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      =D

      Thank you! I feel so special now. I wrote it after I attended an As I Lay Dying show a few nights ago. Good times. Thanks so much for your comment. And about me commenting you, you're a brilliant writer; never let anyone ever tell you otherwise.


  • Eternal-Dreamer
    January 13, 2008

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    this is realy pretty i like it its got some problems with the rythm but i think its a realy good write