You think you're life is a livin hell,
Well then you should check in to heartbreak hotel,
Once you check in dont plan on leaving soon,
Because you won't reconize what'll take over you,
You have never felt pain like this before,
And no ones around to hear you scream anymore,
You feel alone and it is because you are,
You can look at the sky but there are no stars,
Entertainment is gone everything stays boring and flat,
The days grow shorter till your brightest day is black,
When the evil takes over your world you'll never be the same,
think you can handle it? Think again, this pain is no game!
Everything becomes so cold you'll never feel warmth again,
everything is so cold you can feel the icy grip of death on your skin,
Come on and stay and join this demented war you can never win,
Becuase No matter what you think you'll never cheack out once you check in!
Author notes
how im feeling right now wanna join i thought not
"Grand Theft Autumn" forbidden desires
A contest entry
- Bring It All by Simply Simple.
1800 points, ended February 26, 2008, 120 entries
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eep..it's so sad...it rings such a true tone though...good...though bad if you're in the heartbreak hotel..I've been there
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Like I said on myspace, its a GREAT poem though I am so sorry that this is personally happening to you. You deserve nothing less than the best! Everyone deserves happiness and I want you to know that I'm here for you, THATS FOREVER!
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The first check in the last line has an "A" in it. just so you know. I'm sure it's just a typo. Either way, it's a very good poem. And I can easily relate. You really did an excellent job on this poem. I don't generally go for "darker" poetry unless it's well written. So your in luck. Wonderful write and best of luck. ^.^
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Great description. The imagery really conveyed the pain of heartbreak.
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thank you means alot
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