Now listen carefully.
The sound you don't hear is
Your heart, which stopped around
Seven last night. But don't
Think too much about it,
Because everything is okay.
I promise.
You know those moments that
Last forever?
This is one.
Author notes
I've been away from poetry for awhile. Can't say I'm getting back into it--I've lately been seized with an utter revulsion for my own work--so much as my musical ear won't leave me alone. Isn't it crazy how many one syllable words English has?
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WHOA!!! Another show-stopper!
This was just as brilliant as your other poem. You laced it with just enough details to make it interesting, but left out enough to make it engaging. You have a real talent for pulling the reader in and making them feel as though they are a part of the poem itself... or even the subject.
I love the way this one ended.
Please write more!!!
I'll have to check out your stories when I have time.
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Yes, come back to us... this is simply... wonderfully refreshing is to small an appraisal. BUT IT IS!
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Wow, this spopped me in my tracks, this is so beautiful, well done. I really loved reading this. Well done.
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simple and a captivating poem, indeed.
you seem to be writing quite all right
with this simply penned piece of yours ^^
all in all, this short write is
intriguing and had a unique streak in it ^^ -
Hello there, Anna!
There is an interesting concept in this poem. Your Notes make me think it may be a first draft. i hope you revise it because it shows great promise.
I’m glad I came along and clicked on your poem. It made me think that life could just be one long dream or if it goes badly, then one long nightmare. How do we know we are alive? How do we know we are dead? Maybe we are all actors in a movie?
Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Have an awesome day,
BJ.
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well, welcome back to poetry! looks like you're doing just fine to me.
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this is the voice of the soul here making the verdicts at the stage of surprise and at the stage of the wonderful poetry..and thank you so much sharing this with the readers..well done...
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