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Drakonian Imaginings

We speak the beasts language of Chaos and Anger
They speak our language of Fire rains and Blood
Together, destruction solely in our wake
Yet, naturally the beast turns and calls it me
So forced to fight for a life rightfully mine
Wishing for no more then my dragonelle
Wasting away in a humane hell
His hateful attack on his undeniable friend
Brings tears to my eyes as I'm forced to defend
Hearth and Home, why did I believe he'd trust me?
He won't stop till a death toll is paid
So he has dug an early grave.

Author notes

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Its suposed to be from the perspective of the dragon.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    February 21, 2008

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    I really liked the way you used the dragons perspective I was wondering why you suddenly began to rhyme in the middle of the poem though? It was a little disruptive to the flow of the write... the other thing I thought I'd mention, is that in the last line you have used old english (with 'hath') but that is the only time in the poem - to make it more consistent it would help by having more language like that throughout the poem... just a suggestion though ... I really liked the story that this told - of the betrayal of dragons by mankind, very vivid.

    Keep writing

    Polly


    • LoneFairrie
      February 21, 2008
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      Any rhymeing was unintentional. Though I am going to fix that Hath, I didn't mean to do that... heh


  • BlueEyeWonder1988
    January 30, 2008

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    Dragons? not bad . .

    It's a good lil' write. Thanks 4 entering my contest. Let the best shining poet win the honor . . . Keep writing and you'll get better. goodluck.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    January 19, 2008

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    This is really good. I love dragons! they are seo awesome! keep up your amazing work and best of luck in the contests.

    Crimson


  • storiesuntold gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    Good write here

    You have penned this very well about the dragons way


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 17, 2008

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    Aww this is so sad, I feel sorry for the poor dragon now. Very well penned and very creative. Best of luck with it in the contest

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