I want to see what others can’t see…
The real beauty of creation,
The art behind its formation,
The spirit that lies within,
Which makes my heart sing…
Better than from any voice rocking.
The purpose of every existence,
The life we hold,
The real thing behind our feelings,
Imagination the mind can conceive…
freely flying in our whims.
The noise of the wind,
whispering notes to my ears
Like words never been heard
Startin’ to be made
For the sake of our race.
The nature dwelling with us,
Splendid artwork, indeed!
A special gift of love,
From the Creator’s palm.
The eternal music from heaven
Impossible on earth
Pure…
Healing…
Everlasting.
God now I plea!
If thy permits…
Let the eyes of my heart see
The things around me,
That my eyes are blind to see,
That my mind is blank to perceive,
And distinguished mirage from real,
The truth from lies,
A soul from spirit,
So I can create the right judgment-
Of a real image...!?
Author notes
Although i'm still trying to work or polish and arrange the thought on this one, I just add it...hope you can help me!!!....I still can't think the other lines!
A contest entry
- Nature by Random Goldfish.
500 points, ended February 17, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
HOW ABOUT THIS ONE, WHAT CAN YOU SAY?
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I really liked the words you used and how much emotion you expressed, while expressing your feelings =]. But why the exclamation and question mark at the end?
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....hmm...honestly i also don't know,
..that time i'm still trying to think other lines but can't come up with.....thank you for your comment Nephlim! (http://hubpages.com/my/tracker/1vk6kexjyi8mf)
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Excellent!!!
Very well written, versed & structured!
A beautiful and profound message.
You had a lot to say and you said it well!
I admire your talent as well as the honesty and sincerity in your words.
***Also--Thank you for your kind comments on my poem
entitled "A Buried Treasure".
I consider that to be my best composition!
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I can really feel power in these words. It tells me to take a second look at all around me; everything is so beautiful...even the unconventional.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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It's great
The beuty about poetry is no matter what the poem is about it came from the heart and no body can take that from you, no matter what they say. This piece say's that too. It tells me to stop and listen to the beuty of the world. Open my eyes and see what creation's our God has givin us to look at, and listen to the song of the birds that fill our air. Thanks fer the insperation
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thank you very much!
...thank you for dropping by and take time to read my poem...GOD creations are indeed magnificent and perfect..we just need to appreaciate them!...thanks again!
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What a beautiful piece. A real yearning to experience everything. I enjoyed it immensely!
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thank you very much!..:>
....i'm happy that you enjoyed it!
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For all in wisdom she created
a splended write,so much feeling and desire to see the real beauty and understand the spledor of Creation
well done
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thank you very much Sir!..:>
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PERFECT
hi there my friend,
I have just finished reading your poem and wish to say just how much i have enjoyed the read.I tried to pick out a few things that i liked the best, and this was extremely hard to do as i adore the whole poem, but i do feel that the lines below....
God now I plea!
If thy permits…
Let the eyes of my heart see
The things around me,
That my eyes are blind to see,
That my mind is blank to perceive,
And distinguished mirage from real,
The truth from lies,
A soul from spirit,
So I can create the right judgment-
Of a real image...!?
give one a special message.I like the whole flow of the write and the message given.I see great talent in your write and would love to see you write more along these lines, as one can see that you speak from your heart.
You have been a real pleasure to read and i thank you for sharing such beutiful words with us.
Take care,
~Angel~
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hello ma'am!
...thank you very much for that heart warming comment!...if my emotions run to my blood again, maybe i can add some other lines in that part because it's also my favorite,
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