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This is Love

The satin cheek of the moon
shining down on a love so pure,
a love so new.
A journey of two hearts intertwined
sailing to kiss the stars for the first time.
A flowering rose catches the last tear,
defeating the void of loneliness
and mending broken places.
Feet move to the beat of music
only heard when the stars aline.
These stars smile down
to give glimpses of true beauty
brought forth in the dim light.
A haven errected in hands
meant to be held.
Nervous, static excitement blends
into a peace of passion and understanding.
The mind is free
to stretch its wings and dream.
This is Love.

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Breezie I am!
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  • Muffinlady
    June 1, 2008

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    wow,
    i love the imagery you create in this poem.. theres a feeling of warmth within this poem that i love.

    =)


  • lost
    May 18, 2008
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    this i gr8, its relly descriptive.


  • Shassidy
    April 4, 2008

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    I really like this poem! It has really powerful imagery that flows and works well together. I actually know a song titled "This Is Love", although it's a Japanese song, but that's what first came to my mind when I read the title. I like how you kind of defined "love" in the poem without ever really defining it. Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    this indeed was a unique piece. Enjoyed the read. Best wishes to you in the contest.
    Please put name in author notes.
    Thank you.

    Passions


  • crystallynnbradford
    March 10, 2008

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    i am very impressed...i have not found one cliche thing in this piece....very impressive...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • N e a r
    February 25, 2008

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    A variety of sorts here... A handful of imagery that can really connect to love. Each image holds a powerful meaning, and you've done a good job at using these objects and various things to hold your emotions in and to express yourself. Beautifully written!
    Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!
    M a r l u x i a


  • Florida Sunshine
    February 24, 2008

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    So much packed into one poem ~ I really enjoyed reading this ~ you did a terrific free write ~ Thanks so much for entering our contest ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with us ~ Best of luck to you!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 24, 2008

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    It certainly is! Beautiful
    words and emotion in this one.
    Well done and good luck to you!
    Keep up the great work here
    and thanks for sharing it!




    Jeremy0826


  • With Broken Wings
    February 23, 2008
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    Aww!! Its pretty =] I like it, thanks for the entry!! Lots of Luck!!

    <3 Lifes Sorrow

  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008
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    ~
    What gorgeous and sceneric imagery. The moon and stars... a great metaphor to use with love poetry. You could reach the moon and back with this great feeling. Your poem expresses those feelings masterfully... This is love.. wonderful.
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    What an exquisite description of love. I absolutely was swept away by the romantic, whimsical feelings of your poem. It held such lovely metaphors of love as well, like;

    "A journey of two hearts intertwined
    sailing to kiss the stars for the first time."

    and,

    "A flowering rose catches the last tear,
    defeating the void of loneliness"

    Absolutely lovely; I really enjoyed reading this uplifting write. Thank you for sharing and best wishes!





  • SchizoChic
    February 15, 2008
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    Very Passionate. Best of luck.


  • CountryCousin
    February 14, 2008

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    Your passages.

    I was captivated by the descriptive passages of your piece. When you used the satin cheeks of the moon. I thought well you know it does look like that. You put into words a feeling that I get when looking at the moon.


  • knot2tangled
    January 29, 2008

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    This is Love!!!

    Especially when the mind is free!
    When I'm in love usually my mind is in the clouds & I'm in some kind of lala state!
    Oh, to be clear headed & knot be a bumb magnet.
    Thanks for your poem.

    Knot


  • Room without doors gold member
    January 27, 2008

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    Outstanding

    I really liked your choice of language and the imagery you used in this poem. You create a feeling of love which reaches out ad captures something of its magic. Best of luck in the contest.

  • LlamaLord
    January 13, 2008
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    mmm

    thanks.... i needed to read this... forgot what it feels like...

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