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smoke

a seed bursts forth into a tree,
after so many years of growing
the tiny seed creates a tall strong oak.
But we humans burn and burn,
not caring where we're going,
till there's nothing but ashes and smoke.

my friend Keith wrote the original but he let me touch up on it cuz it has real potential.

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  • Perception
    March 6, 2008

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    hmmm... I like the idea behind this too... It could go on a bit longer... it really does have real potential... I really like the images and thoughts it brought forward. How we humans... are trashing lives...

    Hmmm... wonderful


  • The Hidden Darkness
    February 6, 2008

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    not bad, overall i do like the idea that mankind is sucking the earth of all its nutrients and in turn destroying it without a though. well done on this poem!